Prompt: Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
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A few months ago I was completing a jigsaw puzzle with my mother. She said, pointing at a piece with four tabs, "Look, this one's easy to place in the puzzle. It's a very usual piece." Her comment baffled me. I told her "I don't think it will be easier. I think the weird-looking pieces are the ones that stick out from the pile, making them easier to find and place in their appropriate places." She giggled and said "Of course you do. You're my unique piece. You're right, that makes more sense." I smiled as I realized with utter clarity, probably for the first time, the purpose of my innate weirdness.
I have been called weird my entire life. When I was younger, I would consider being weird a negative quality, but I have learned that I cannot change that part of myself, so I might as well embrace it. I am the type of person that carries a Rubik's cube everywhere-even to parties-, that wears "I heart Elephant" socks to school, and says random fun facts and puns. I also carry a plush elephant key chain that I have named Effie the ephalent (yes, ephalent, not elephant) and I have memorized almost every line to the movie Frozen. By eighth grade I had already learned bone and organ anatomy as well as symptoms, treatments, and causes of some diseases (in eighth grade, I was actually able to provide two correct diagnoses to a friend). My friends would tease me because I had more medical apps than entertainment apps on my phone.
Until only recently, my friends would roll their eyes at me as I told them that "a bolt of lightning is five times hotter than the surface of the Sun". Now they come to me for fun facts and additional information about the topic and material of their projects, homework, exams, and curiosities. Actually, a few days ago, after hearing about the Paris terrorist attack, a friend came to me to ask me about ISIS and its history. I told her a summary about what I knew about ISIS and suggested a short explanatory video that I had seen a few days prior. We also researched together a bit more on the topic. My friends still roll their eyes at me occasionally and say the usual "Gosh Dani, you're so strange" to which I respond with the usual laugh and "Don't be boorish. I take up space and have mass. I matter."
Being weird is an essential part of who I am and I do not carry this quality with its commonly negative connotation; I rather carry it with pride. I am one of the strangely looking pieces of the pile of jigsaw pieces and am aware that there are other strangely looking pieces that a take part in the puzzle. I have now come to understand that even the weirdest piece has its own place in the puzzle, that I have my own place and purpose in this world. But now I'm just getting too sentimental and blah so I'll end with this somewhat unrelated quote said by the energetic, awkward and optimistic Princess Anna of Arendelle: "Do you want to build a snowman?"
Also, it would be very helpful if you could include your opinion of the type of person you can get out of this essay.
Thank you!!
dBres, to address your first dilemma on the title of your essay, I believe " A Jigsaw Puzzle " as a title is good, it creates an illusion and trickery of the essay, this usually draws attention from the readers more so from the panel.
Now, as I always tell students here on EF, segmented paragraphs or keeping your paragraphs short but many, does not merit anything rather
than keeping your essay look trying so hard, it also does not leave a good impression to the panel who will scrutinize your essay, so I suggest you
merge the paragraphs and keep it to the minimum of 3 paragraphs if you can.
Once you write your revision, please make sure that you don't delete the necessary paragraphs that strengthens the essay.
I'd like to help you out on the last 2 paragraphs of your essay.
3rd paragraph
- Until only recently, my friends would roll
- projects, homework, exams, and curiositiescuriousness .
- "Don't be boorishboring .
Last paragraph
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- But nowHowever, I'm just getting too sentimental and blah so I'll end with this somewhat unrelatedso I leave you with this quote
- said byfrom the energetic, awkward and optimistic Princess Anna of Arendelle: "Do you want to build a snowman?"
Well, there you have it dBres, I believe your essay is quiet fascinating and it will take a good load of creative juices to comprehend and be able to uncover where you're coming from.
