The questions is: What unique aspect of Lehigh Most interests you?
During my visit to Lehigh University, I realized that Lehigh was not a typical engineering and sciences focused school. I found that Lehigh was bursting with creativity, and it seemed that the students didn't just work, study, and learn at Lehigh; they lived at Lehigh. It all started with my peppy tour guide, who convinced me with her attitude and enthusiasm that she has never regretted her decision to attend Lehigh. I remember as she told my tour group the extensive list of things she was involved in. Not only was she pursuing a major in both business and computer science, she was a member of at least 3 different clubs and volunteer organizations, as well as a sorority. After I graduate college I want to look back and say that not only did I learn a lot, but I also accomplished a lot. Lehigh's emphasis on making interdisciplinary study easy is so appealing to me I have trouble imagining myself at a different school. I see myself as an engineer, but I also love the physics and science behind it. At Lehigh I have the ability to pursue both of these passions, something I couldn't at most other schools. I see myself being as involved as I can. I want to join clubs, study abroad, and do research. I want to go to Lehigh.
My first draft for my first essay, please help. What I'm worried about besides grammar and structure is if I answer the question well enough, or if it sounds corny (especially the ending). Also, do you think I say Lehigh too much?
During my visit to Lehigh University, I realized that Lehigh was not a typical engineering and sciences focused school. I found that Lehigh was bursting with creativity, and it seemed that the students didn't just work, study, and learn at Lehigh; they lived at Lehigh. It all started with my peppy tour guide, who convinced me with her attitude and enthusiasm that she has never regretted her decision to attend Lehigh. I remember as she told my tour group the extensive list of things she was involved in. Not only was she pursuing a major in both business and computer science, she was a member of at least 3 different clubs and volunteer organizations, as well as a sorority. After I graduate college I want to look back and say that not only did I learn a lot, but I also accomplished a lot. Lehigh's emphasis on making interdisciplinary study easy is so appealing to me I have trouble imagining myself at a different school. I see myself as an engineer, but I also love the physics and science behind it. At Lehigh I have the ability to pursue both of these passions, something I couldn't at most other schools. I see myself being as involved as I can. I want to join clubs, study abroad, and do research. I want to go to Lehigh.
My first draft for my first essay, please help. What I'm worried about besides grammar and structure is if I answer the question well enough, or if it sounds corny (especially the ending). Also, do you think I say Lehigh too much?