The questions is: What unique aspect of Lehigh Most interests you?
During my visit to Lehigh University, I realized that Lehigh was not a typical engineering and sciences focused school. I found that Lehigh was bursting with creativity, and it seemed that the students didn't just work, study, and learn at Lehigh; they lived at Lehigh. It all started with my peppy tour guide, who convinced me with her attitude and enthusiasm that she has never regretted her decision to attend Lehigh. I remember as she told my tour group the extensive list of things she was involved in. Not only was she pursuing a major in both business and computer science, she was a member of at least 3 different clubs and volunteer organizations, as well as a sorority. After I graduate college I want to look back and say that not only did I learn a lot, but I also accomplished a lot. Lehigh's emphasis on making interdisciplinary study easy is so appealing to me I have trouble imagining myself at a different school. I see myself as an engineer, but I also love the physics and science behind it. At Lehigh I have the ability to pursue both of these passions, something I couldn't at most other schools. I see myself being as involved as I can. I want to join clubs, study abroad, and do research. I want to go to Lehigh.
My first draft for my first essay, please help. What I'm worried about besides grammar and structure is if I answer the question well enough, or if it sounds corny (especially the ending). Also, do you think I say Lehigh too much?
Thanks a lot for the help! As it stands now:
As soon as I arrived at Lehigh I realized that it wasn't a typical engineering and science oriented school. I found that Lehigh was bursting with creativity, and it seemed that the students didn't just work, study, and learn; but they lived at Lehigh. It all started with my peppy tour guide, who convinced me with her attitude and enthusiasm that she never had any reason to regret coming to Lehigh. I remember as she told my tour group the extensive list of things she was involved in. Not only was she pursuing a major in both business and computer science, but she detailed her many other activities, leaving me fascinated. After I graduate college I want to look back and say that not only did I learn a lot, but I also accomplished a lot. Lehigh's emphasis on making interdisciplinary study easy is so appealing to me that I have trouble imagining myself at a different school. I see myself as an engineer, but I also love the physics and science behind it, and at Lehigh I have the ability to pursue both of these passions. I want to be like my tour guide, joining clubs, studying abroad, enriching myself with all this school has to offer. Overall, Lehigh's perspective of a college education is a perfect fit for my own.
So do you think I properly answer the question?
