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JOURNALISM ,"This is mine, I created this"; GOALS


nivanov23 2 / 2  
Jan 19, 2013   #1
Prompt: Tell us more about one of the activities you listed above, explaining what your goals were, what you did to pursue them, the results achieved, and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)

(One of the activities I listed was participating in the student newspaper)

Tick-tock, tick-tock. The second hand booms and echoes in the confines of the journalism room, cruelly reminding us all of one blatant fact: we have been here too long.

It is well past nine and I find myself still at school, staring blankly at an open newspaper draft on one of our antiquated computer screens. The words on each page are a blur, but I have to concentrate, lest some stupid mistake finds its way to the printers tomorrow. An incorrectly captioned picture? A misspelling of a star athlete's name? Not on my watch. These are the tiny slips that can kill a newspaper's reputation, and I will not let my drowsiness get in the way of catching them.

So I press on, along with any remaining staff members and our dedicated advisor-Mr. Duncan. We stay for the reward of one day holding the finished product in our hands and being able to say, "This is mine, I created this," as we let the ink permeate into our fingers.

But for now, tick-tock, tick-tock.

Basically, I'm reusing my common app 1,000 character EC essay. My question is, does it work for this particular prompt? Is there anything I should tweak?
love_mashimaro2 - / 22  
Jan 19, 2013   #2
Tick-tock, tick-tock. The second hand booms and echoes in the confines of the journalism room, cruelly reminding us all of one blatant fact: we have been here too long.

I would definitely leave this out. Isn't participating for the student newspaper something you felt proud about? When I read this, it sounded like you were dreading over something.

In general, I do no think that this answers the prompt. If you can find a time where working for the student newspaper was an achievement then include it. Best of luck!
CherryPac18 10 / 29 1  
Jan 19, 2013   #3
I think the prompt was well written but I don't think you clearly explain your goals, what you did to pursue them, the results achieved, and what you learned in the process. Your prompt just describes a long day at the office.
love_mashimaro2 - / 22  
Jan 19, 2013   #4
Please let me know if I did a good job helping you with your essay! Thank you! :)
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 19, 2013   #5
Hmmm... You have written it well but most of your parts are unnecessary I believe. You have not clearly explained what your goals are. Nor have you shown what you achieved. Your sounds like a story.


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