My journey towards success - This is for my common application

would appreciate it if anyone can help me know if my essay needs more work and an advice on what changes i need to make..

Thanx

They say success comes from the sweat and tears of hard work, experience and initiative. I have never climbed uphill barefoot neither tripped over an obstacle. My journey barefoot started while working with autistic kids. It was a god sent job to compensate the love I have to go to medical school and have a job in the medical field. The experience I gained working individually with every child is like amassing fortunes.

Growing up spoon-fed to every need and having the financial luxury my father was blessed with I never knew the meaning of neither patience nor obstacles. This experience has influenced my goals because if I had not went through it, I would not have known patience,determination, success and ambition truly. I am very grateful for such an eye-opening event in my life. Moreover, I know now that truly "What does not kill me, makes me stronger."

Is this for the main common app essay? I think it definitely needs to be longer.

Yes this is the first essay in the common application. It says:

In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities ( extracurricular, personal activities, oe work experience) ( 150 words or fewer)...

They say success comes from the sweat and tears of hard work, experience and initiative. -- I think I just commented on this sentence in another of your essays. It seems wrong to write:

Sweat of -----> experience and initiative
It only goes with "work"
You should write it this way:
They say success comes from the sweat and tears of hard work, experience and initiative.

I have never climbed uphill barefoot, nor have I tripped over an obstacle. --- I am not sure what this sentence is supposed to mean! :-)

My journey barefoot started while working with autistic kids. -- I on't know what "barefoot journey" is supposed to represent!

It was a God-sent job that accommodated the love I have to go to medical school for medicine and desire to have a job in the medical field.

This comes out of nowhere - the extent of "what does not kill" has not been eluded to earlier

You have to take care in your spelling and the way you have stated idea as well. Hope extensive reading on different topics will improve your writing.