Describe the world you come from for example, your family, community or school and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
Born and lived in Korea for sixteen years, I think Korea is harsh place to live in and to study for teenagers because they have to carry tremendous amount of responsibilities and duties. Even if I was ranked in the top ten percent of my high school, I was so exhausted and tired of arduous reality. And, my family gave me an opportunity to change my life dramatically: moving to the United States about two years ago.
My parents' expectations for me have shaped my enthusiasm for learning. As I grew up, my mother gave me various chances to learn playing the piano, violin, swimming, ballet, art, English, Chinese characters, and even calligraphy; thus, I learned them for about seven-eight years. However, they did not attract my attention; besides, I was stressed out for such obligations and became losing interests in learning. When I was fourteen years old, my younger sister got slight cerebral concussion with hemorrhage. Because she had to get brain surgery, my parents mostly stayed at the hospital for a month and I was left at home alone so, I became lonely and thought nobody loved me. One day, I accidently read my mother's diary with curiosity; I realized how much she worries me and she is sorry for my isolation. After the day of realization, I started spending my most time on studying. Fortunately, I obtained gratifying results and even received scholarships from an academy so, I tasted the jubilance of achievement. Therefore, I kept studying in order to maintain my scores but whenever the exams were coming up, I could hardly sleep or eat and even my body became cold due to extreme amount of stresses; on the other hand, I was pleased that scores never abandoned my efforts and, I recognized the importance of learning.
Furthermore, I was greatly affected by my mother's passion for learning. She went to top ranked university and graduated school but, she had to give up her dream due to marriage. Thus, when my mother me that she wants to go to America with my sister to study the oriental medicine, we had to let her leave since she desired to heal ill people physically with acupuncture as well as mentally by psychology. Consequently, I had to live with my father for six months and this time was desolate and solitary period because my father was too busy to take care of me; therefore, I came to live in the US to live with my mother and sister. After I came to the US, I found my vision and my dream: becoming a pharmacist and helping sick people. I saw my mother cured many patients and those patients could enjoy better and healthier lives. Since I am so afraid of blood and death, I do not want to operate surgery but I desire to help them by medicine. Moreover, my final goal is helping and treating needy people in poor country as missionaries with my mother.
Honestly, I did not understand my mother tried to persuade her to live like normal mother who just care about domestic chores and their children; however, now I respect her enthusiasm and perseverance. Likewise, I resolved that I will not renounce my aspirations and strive for my future patients.
Please help me out revising my essay because i am not really good at English ㅜㅜ
Having lived in Korea for sixteen years, I came to think of it as a harsh place to live in and to study for teenagers, because they have to carry tremendous amount of responsibilities and duties.
Two years ago, my family gave me an opportunity to change my life dramatically: moving to the United States. about two years ago.
She went to a top-ranked university and graduated school, bu t she had to give up her dream due to marriage. Thus, when my mother told me that she wanted to go to America with my sister to study the oriental medicine, we had to accept her decision, since she desired to heal ill people physically with acupuncture as well as mentally by psychology.
I saw my mother cure many patients, and those patients could enjoy better and healthier lives.
Your mother must be a very intelligent person! You are so lucky. It is nice that you are following her into the world of medicine; she and your father should be proud.
