I can now juggle up to four objects-- albeit slowly and irregularly, but for a person whose hand eye coordination isn't completely in sync I feel proud that I persevered.
Great sentence! And I am so jealous! I feel like I could never juggle 4 things.. But I learned from KingsCascade.com how to juggle 3 things.
I think that last sentence of the first paragraph is... well, add a sentence after it. Add another sentence to sum up the idea you are conveying in this essay. The big idea of the essay.
You should have more about this: learnt to focus on the task at hand--- and you should do more REFLECTION and self-analysis, know what I mean? Talk about the significance of it. As an amateur juggler, I know it is a wide-eyed meditation. You can talk about that meditative state of mind.
typo: egardless
I know my advice is very late, sorry!