short essay (approximately 150 words): introduce yourself to Penn. Our aim is to better understand how your identity, talents, and background guide your day-to-day experiences.
Keep moving forward - this motto has shaped my identity. When my peers settled at one place, I moved with my family to the unpopulated Korean mountains and learned the survival skills in the wild. I gained the adventurer's spirits during my childhood. When I turned 15, I went to the United States purely motivated by curiosity. And I enjoyed the challenges, thrills, and excitement that I would get while living with the daily farmers in northern Michigan and another year with a middle-class American family in Vermont.
After my freshman year in college, I chose to fulfill the military service. Throughout the dynamic, rollercoaster-like experiences in the military society, I matured. I learned how to control myself. Now is the time to return to the school, and I greatly desire to immerge myself into the academics and prepare for the more challenging adventure: the real world. My new journey will continue.
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