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keep walking with no sign of stop--my uw-Seattle long personal statement


sniperjason 1 / -  
Nov 19, 2011   #1
Tell us a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it.

The personal data enclosed in this application file will demonstrate my profile as a transitional life, which has shaped my personality- inclusive and unique, smart and open-minded. My whole life, since I was a child, can actually be annotated to be a process of change in terms of living places, living conditions, opinions and habits. When I was a little child living with my parents, we moved from city to city, from the agricultural town of the northeast to the northwest of the industrial city. And now, I am living in a port city near the capital. In the past, I was forced to change by external forces, but now, I want to change because of the aspiration of exploration.

My desire has been firmly fixed up after watching the lecture called Really Achieving Your Childhood Dreams by Randy Pausch. I realized that what changed most in my life was the way that I want to use to change the situation in some parts of our world.

I was born in Ulanhot, Inner Mongolia where I spent my entire childhood. There is no hypocrisy and deceit, but a little bit backward. When I was primary schooling there, I was obsessed with literature and social sciences. I expected to change my living conditions with my ideas and words, which impelled my participation in literary or speech contest. I, at about 9 years old, a tender age, began to think pretty adult questions. Three years later, I, along with my family, moved to another northwest city. It was a truly new city, Both for me and it's own. We lived there peacefully, equally, tenaciously and not competitively. I began to doubt perhaps there was another better way to change my situation around.

Three years later, it seemed that I have found the answer to the question haunting my mind. My family migrated to a coastal city - Qinhuangdao, a more open city. Here I visited Qinhuangdao Shanhaiguan Shipyard (China's largest shipyard), and joined the Chinese Red Cross rescue team called Blue Sky. I found myself more social, more competitive and more open-minded. I told myself, the effect that words and opinions have brought would be profound, but the process is bound to be difficult and requires right time. In contrary, the power of technology has the more possibility to change our lives. Technology is better to help me achieve what I am more willing to do. Looking back the vehicles-train, we usually used during our family's migrations; I found it has experienced big technology reforms. Due to the improvement, I truly felt the immediate benefits technology has brought.

I have been walking for 19 years, never showing any signs of stopping, whether physical or ideological. However, my thought to be an engineer has been confirmed. Today, I'm still walking, and my mind is still changing. I would like to scale still higher intellectual heights by pursuing advanced studies, an education process that I hope will gain me the competitive edge for personal growth and push me to the forefront of scientific progress. Will UW-Seattle be my next stop?
gebeterne 1 / 2  
Nov 19, 2011   #2
I think it's a good essay, overall. I like your conclusion paragraph and how you merged your interest in engineering into this essay.


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