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UC Prompt #2: Dr King


saladbar_12 1 / -  
Nov 15, 2009   #1
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?

I could lie. I could say that my favorite things to do are take derivatives and study the pulmonary and systemic circuits of the human body. But I won't, because as much as math and biology capture my interest, I can't think of anything I'd rather do at any given moment than play Frisbee with my Dad. Sure it sounds cheesy, but there's just something about a perfect throw, rundown, and catch that I just can't explain. Most people might take such simple actions for granted, but not me, I'm lucky. I was born with club feet, a birth defect that could have easily left me in a wheelchair for my entire life, let alone running down and snatching (one-handed of course) a disk out of its 747-like glide through the air.

Maybe it wasn't all luck, but more the skill of my brilliant, albeit permanently grumpy, orthopedist Dr. King, whom despite knowing for my whole life I've never caught his first name. While I may not know his first name, I know his smile all too well. This rather elusive show of emotion creeps its way over his face every time I run down the narrow hallway I've gotten to know all too well in my annual visits. The hallway I can now clear in only a few strides, used to take forever as I would pitter-patter my way down. However, not all the other kids with club feet I see are able to experience these moments with the same joy I am. These moments combined with a natural inclination for math and science have fostered my desire to become a biomedical engineer, as I'd like to somehow improve the situations of those less fortunate than me, even if it's just as insignificant as producing a sly smile out of Dr. King.

While I may not be proud of certain aspects of having club feet (I have skinny legs), I am proud to know that I am considered a success story in the eyes of my doctors. Thanks to the effectiveness of the surgeries and the lengthy casting that followed, I can live my life without being considered disabled. These thanks can, at least partly, go out to biomedical engineers, whose research and collaboration with surgeons and orthopedists has continually improved the treatment of club feet to the point that most cases now don't require surgery.

I've always been drawn toward math and science, particularly biology, so maybe I had already chosen biomedical engineering without even knowing it. And, when I first sat down in a phone-ipod-facebook-free environment and did some real research as to what I want to devote the rest of my working life to, and discovered biomedical engineering: I had my answer. As for my non-working life, there's always Frisbee.
Godizgood 3 / 18  
Nov 15, 2009   #2
i think u did an excellent job ur essay was interesting and i couldnt stop reading. good openeing statement. i think u should talk a little bit more about boimedical enginnering
mackenson10 1 / 2  
Nov 15, 2009   #3
Great Introduction, i could hear your voice in the opening statement. On your last Paragraph you should elaborate more on biomedical engineering.Also this sentence confused me "And, when I first sat down in a phone-ipod-facebook-free environment" are you trying to say without those distractions you were able to think and get you work done?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Nov 16, 2009   #4
Yes! Elaborate on biomed engineering, because you can show that you already read articles about breakthroughs and research projects, etc. That will be very impressive. How can an admissions person deny admission to a student already immersed in the literature of her/his intended field?

Julian gave you a heck of a compliment! That is the highest of all compliments for a writer.

If Dr. King has written some journal articles, it would be great to cite one of them and show that you became fascinated with the kind of work he does, as well...


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