Korean Culture - about extracurricular activity

Hello! I am working on the short answer on common app "Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences" Can anyone check mine is enough for the topic? Thank you : )

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Working as a vice president at Korean culture club was an exciting learning opportunity. Living in a foreign culture has been an amazing experience and I always wanted to introduce my own culture to other people. Sharing this goal with a number of my Korean friends from college, we started the club. We thought food was one of the easiest ways to approach people. So we set up a small event called Korean food festival. We had many meetings to plan, share ideas, raise money and build the event. Working with my team instilled me what team work was. The festival turned out to be more than what we expected. People came for free food but they also wanted to know more of our food and culture. It was exciting to see people enjoying my culture. Seeing our plan realized into a festival taught me the pleasure of achievement. Being a vice president, I also cultivated responsibility, leadership and management skill. We are currently working on turning this festival into a tradition and I am excited to see what I will earn from this.

Living in a foreign culture has been an amazing experience and I've always wanted to introduce my own culture to other people.

We had many meetings to plan, ideas to share, raise money and build the event.

Working with my team instilled in me what team work was.

People came for free food but they also wanted to know more about our food and culture.

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Guys plsss help me to enhance my Statement.:)