How are you a leader and how will this show on campus?

Hi this is my supplement for UT Austin any feedback will be appreciated!

How do you show leadership in your life? How do you see yourself being a leader at UT Austin?

setting the bar

Tips to consider: Leadership can be demonstrated by positions you hold as an officer in a club or organization, but other types of leadership are important too. Leaders can emerge in various situations at any given time, including outside of the school experience. Please share a brief description of the type of leadership qualities you possess, from school and non-school related experiences, including demonstrations of leadership in your job, your community, or within your family responsibilities, and then share how you hope to demonstrate leadership as a member of our campus community.

In my four years of high school I learned that having a title attached to a position does not define a leader. It has become apparent that being a leader is about setting the bar for others including yourself; carrying out actions that elevate your friends, peers, or even complete strangers. For myself leadership has come in the form of helping my peers in miscellaneous classes to incorporating my best friend into launching my sneaker business. Although these forms of leadership are important to me, the start of my schools robotics club has been taught me thoroughly the gravity of leadership. I always connected with everything engineering and this translated to co-founding our schools first robotics club during my sophomore year with, Chris, a friend of mine. It took months to gather funding, resources, and assemble the club, but eventually everything fell into place. One thing was missing though, not a single girl was part of our team, we had no diversity. One of my goals in starting this club was to bring together as many people that shared the same interest in engineering as I did, and clearly this goal had not been met. This didn't stop us though; we discussed this dilemma with our engineering teacher who was able to convince a group of girls from her class to join. To this day or our robotics club has grown exponentially and has been something I've been extremely proud of. In less than 8 months I hope to be able to carry out the same role I played in my robotics club at UT. On campus to classes a goal of mine will be to play an instrumental part in bringing fellow classmates together in anyway possible.

Jay, there is no true leadership role included in this essay. You are only implying that you have played leadership roles and skills, but the examples are superficial, shallow, and questionable. You need to have better examples, definitive examples in this essay. Opt to choose only one leadership story to present in the response. It should exemplify skills or traits that you believe are important in a leader. This is where the school or non-school related activity comes in. Opt to lengthen the discussion about the robotics club instead by focusing more on your role as the founder of the club. What specific leadership role did you portray and why? From there, focus on how you how you plan on sharing these leadership skills as a student leader at UT Austin. Read the website, look for information about activities that you can participate in so that you can explain how your leadership skills will be useful in that arena. Or, the other option, is for you to explain that you plan to start some new club, organization, or activity on campus which will call upon your leadership skills in order to increase the diversity and uniqueness of the student community.