The quote "With great power comes great responsibility" by Stan Lee rang through my head as my AP US History teacher called me and 4 other students to be that weeks moderators for our socratic seminar.
^Spell out the number four.
Being the moderator is usually the dread of students as you almost have to write shorthand to get everything you need to write down written.
Many students dread becoming moderators due to the amount of notes that have to be taken.
Your first paragraph is a little...weird. I am not a big fan of the quote since it has become overused. It isn't really explained in your essay either.
I became responsible for a entire nation and with that, the fate of the world in my hands and a experience that was one of the most intellectually engaging moments of my life.
I feel that your hyperbole does nothing to spice up your introduction. After reading the rest of your essay I see what you are trying to do with this. It is interesting.
The class was divided into 4 different sides, the Realist, the Wilson Idealists, the Isolationists, and the European Imperialists each trying to convince the 5 League of
nN ations members to follow theretheir own political philosophy, and if they did, theretheir reward would be a free homework pass.
Certainly this seminar was supposed to teach me something about the League of nations or something like that, but in fact turned out to be a much more rewarding experience.
This sentence is too casual. You leave me confused as to how it turned out to be more rewarding than intended. Is it because you found out that leaders use their power for selfish reasons? Is it because you found out that leaders work hard on domestic and international problems?
As the seminar unraveled in that short hour, I learned more about how leaders have to unravel peoples own personal agendas and make critical decisions off that information than any textbook or TV show could ever show.
You use "unravel" twice. This sentence confuses me.