Adaptation and Patience
Bam! A punch to my face.
Like any other time, I would have easily gotten angry and throw back the punch. But this time was different cause I have grown from the angry, impatient boy I used to be. I keep my cool and handle the situation.
It is the second match of our own private league of football and suddenly a fight breaks out, everyone grabbing everybody else trying to break the fight, one gets punched while breaking the fight and another fight starts. I thought," Yeah! the match is done." So getting into the middle of the fight, I try to break it but I get punched. Yet I keep my cool and whisper to one of the people fighting, "Let me handle this, you back off!" and that is all it took. I settled everybody in the next few minutes. Looking back at it, I have always thought, why it was me they listened to and not others who were desperately trying to stop the fight, why it was me who just had to get involved at all, why did not I react when I got punched and finally I have realized these fights are normal for me. I grew up in a joint family with always present three or four siblings, cousins and sometimes more. Getting into a fight, separating other people in a fight and knowing the right things to say, overall, my ability to adapt has always been my fortitude. Over these past years, I have been more reliable and that is why people listen to me. I was the one that made sure the football venue was always ready for our teams, I made sure that the price for it was lowered and that is why they listened to me while in the fight.
Growing up in a family of ten, I have always found myself surrounded by chaos. My home was loud, noisy and messy. Brothers and sisters fighting, somebody always shouting from the kitchen to make sure everybody comes up to eat in time, the T.V always on even when nobody watches it but I have learned to adapt, expect the unexpected. What it has helped me most is to understand that life is spontaneous, it throws things at you when you are never ready but handling these randomness has been easy.
Although everything related to me is messy and far from perfection, never I have been able to step away from making small mistakes of my family and friends a little right. Maybe simply turning the TV off, turning off the lights or tidying up after my small brothers and sisters not look like a big part on its own but these are the small gears that help run the whole piece smoothly. This is what I believe, in perfection and patience to do something always on time for bigger things to happen.
I have learned to adapt, learned to be patient and put the hard work, commitment to every little thing so as to create an almost perfect environment for me and everybody around me, hoping college will help me to improve upon my perfection, I can only look forward to it.
I believe if you could 1st give a theory on what is hot temper, rude and patience in contrast, then back up by at least 2 examples, in which how things did go on when you not controlled and then after you be patient, how the outcome be improved.
Always COMPARISON to highlight the benefit of Patience. Because if you dont comepare detailedly enough, it s hard to see why we need to get Patient. About your personality problem leading to why you became angry person, it should be shortened in few sentences. It s not support for the benefit of Patience at all.
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Nischal, I believe that you have not chosen the correct prompt for your essay. The discussion in the essay is centered on your ability to adapt and how it came about. Therefore, it is not focused on an understanding of yourself or others. This is more of an explanatory essay relating to an ability that you have. The way I see it, you have two options to choose from when it comes to changing the prompt for your essay. You can use either:
1. Reflect on a time when you questioned or challenged a belief or idea. What prompted your thinking? What was the outcome? [
2. Share an essay on any topic of your choice. It can be one you've already written, one that responds to a different prompt, or one of your own design.
The reason why I am suggesting the first prompt is because your essay clearly indicates questions on your part. Questions that are clearly reflected in reference to a time when you questioned an idea. The reason that prompted the question is clear and the outcome is also displayed easily for the reader to understand.
However, you may also use the open prompt option for your essay. The only drawback is that you have to create a clear prompt reference for your essay as a part of the opening paragraph. The first sentence is the topic sentence where you can insert that reference for the benefit of the reviewer.
I've given you the options for your essay prompt choices. You just have to pick the one you feel best represents your writing. There is no need for you to write a totally new essay. This one works just fine.