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I have been learning Physics in advanced level which galvanizes me to find more books myself


huanbumdev 1 / 1  
Sep 28, 2016   #1
In an effort to understand your interests and aspirations for college, we ask you to select one of the three topics below and provide a response of up to 250 words.

Bowdoin students and alumni often cite world-class faculty and opportunities for intellectual engagement, the College's commitment to the Common Good, and the special quality of life on the coast of Maine as important aspects of the Bowdoin experience.

Reflecting on your own interests and experiences, please select and respond to one of the following topics:
- Intellectual Engagement
- The Common Good
- Connection to Place
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I choose the Intellectual Engagement and this is my essay:

To my experience, I would state that intellectual engagement is the method that a student chooses to learn and gain knowledge from school and on his own. As a student of Le Hong Phong High School for the Gifted in Viet Nam, I have a chance to study with well-educated students and well-qualified teachers. We are encouraged to learn autonomously, but somehow most of us still rely on our teachers. Since I am has been chosen for the Physics Team of the school for two years, I have been learning Physics in advanced level which galvanizes me to find more books myself, and read them whenever I can. Not only did we study theoretical concepts, but the practical and experimental ones as well. When becoming the leader of this team, I have to push myself further, not solely obtain knowledge but also share them over. Being in the team is the best chance to study my passionate interest due to having 26 45-minute periods a week in Physics, which may let an ordinary student down. In these periods, we solve problems in Mr. Irodov's books, learn the advanced type of mechanical and electromagnetic oscillations, solid mechanics, and many others. For the endings, this my favorite saying said my beloved teacher "We study Physics to master the root of the matters and phenomena and use that to understand the nature which now contains lots of enigmas."

How do you guys think about it? Is it fine?

andika_soppeng - / 16 2  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi mate,,,
I have read your writing. however, there are several matter that you need to pay attention,,,

... and well-qualified teachers. IN MY PRIOR COLLAGE,We are encouraged to learn autonomously ...

[s]Since I am has been chosen for the Physics ..,

YOU WRITE WRONG GRAMMATICAL ACCURACY,,,
ENSURE YOU WRITE SUBJECT VERB AGREEMENT PROPERLY

MY ALTERNATIVE...

SINCE I HAD CHOSEN AS A MEMBER OF PHYSICS TEAM IN MY SCHOOL FOR TWO YEARS...

THIS SENTENCE IS PRETTY CONFUSING...

Since I am has been chosen for the Physics Team of the school for two years, I have been learning Physics in advanced level which galvanizes me to find more books myself, and read them whenever I can.

NOTE:

PAY ATTENTION ON

SUBJECT VERB AGREEMENT
MAKE A WELL-ORGANIZE SENTENCE WHICH CAN BE UNDERSTANDABLE FOR READERS


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