There are 4 different essays here corrections and suggestions greatly appreciated
Please tell us what academic class has been your favorite and why?
I enjoy learning about science. It has become my favorite subject in high school. I wanted to take as many possible science classes to be better prepared for those subjects in a college setting. I decided to take AP Chemistry and AP Biology during my junior year to have the possibility of taking AP Physics during my senior year. It was interesting taking Biology and Chemistry concurrently because even though at times the subject matter would be the same, at other times it would involve looking at the topics through different perspectives. Looking at the topic through both perspectives provided for a better overall understanding of the entirety of the subject. The two topics were different in that biology consisted solely of memorization, as opposed to chemistry which relied not only theoretical proof but also on mathematical evidence to support claims.
Having the ability to connect the subject matter learned in biology and chemistry with an understanding of physics provided an even better understanding of the topic. It was enjoyable starting off a new topic in physics and already knowing the majority of the lesson because it was taught in chemistry. Physics for me is the most challenging class I have taken; despite that it is my favorite science course. For me it requires approaching the subject in a different way than that of biology or chemistry. I enjoy the challenge of understanding the topic and being able to apply it to a more common real life setting.
For applicants to the FU Foundation of Engineering and Applied Science, please tell us what attracts you specially to the study of engineering
I became interested in the field of engineering after reading a college brochure titled "Why engineering", after reading the description of each of the majors provided, it became clear to me that the field of engineering was right for me. I planned my junior year in hopes of one day majoring in biomedical engineering at Columbia University. I searched collegeboard to learn more about the major and recommended courses. I took AP biology, AP chemistry, and AP calculus AB to increase my chances at accomplishing my dream. This year I am taking AP physics and AP calculus BC, the knowledge gained from these courses will help me later on to better understand the material need to be a successful biomedical engineer.
With the intent of pursuing an engineering degree I joined M.E.S.A (Math, Engineering, Science, and Achievement) a class focused on connecting academic to the principals of engineering. As the program continued I became more engaged with the field of engineering. The program stepped away from book work and allowed for more hands on projects.
Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why
I have dreamt of walking the Columbia campus since my sophomore year of high school. It's a school filled with endless possibilities (∞P). From all the pictures I have seen of the school, they all show the beautiful city and campus that for me symbolize a world of opportunities- a world I want to explore.
I like the wide array of activities provided through the school. It allows a large group of people to come together for a common cause. I want to find the place I belong; I think that place is Columbia. It's an opportunity to explore the world and grow into the person I want to be. It's an opportunity to gain knowledge from an array of new experiences. Being in one of the greatest cities of the world as a curious student it is easy to find inspiration from the world around.
HoP is appealing to me to learn through more hands on projects. It keeps the curriculum interesting and engaging, and provides a better understanding into an actual engineering career. C2C allows students to be more involved in the community through their studies, is enjoy be an involved member of the community and coming up with ways to help others.
Columbia Engineering= R2 + C2C + HoP + LAB + NYC + ∞P = the place I want to be.
Please tell us what you found meaningful about one of the above mentioned
Bright stage lights, loud music, and multitudes of people who share a common interest coming together. I am standing on the second level from the stage watching my favorite bands as they take the stage. I enjoy going to concerts, I feel connected with everyone around me; we share a bond with a common interests in music. It's a sold out show there are hundreds of young people in one venue. I find it amazing watching so many people come out for a common cause and fills my head with possibilities for the future.
I love watching the bands play as the take control of the stage. I stand in awe at the stage presence of these performers for having the ability to share their voice and connect with a multitude of people. I hope to strengthen my voice to get my ideas out to the world for a better cause. I want to be able to reach out to others as the performer on the stage does.
No worries come across my mind for thing the time being. This moment is filled solely with music, it's a time to relax and enjoy the atmosphere around me.
Essay 1 -- The two topics were different in that biology consisted solely of memorization, as opposed to chemistry which relied not only on theoretical proof but also on mathematical evidence to support claims.
Essay 2 -- I became interested in the field of engineering after reading a college brochure titled "Why engineering". Split into 2 separate sentences. After reading the description of each of the majors provided, it became clear to me that my passion lay in engineering .
Essay 3 -- This needs revision since it is generic and full of cliches, and lacks depth and breadth. You need to talk more about yourself, since that is what the admissions team is interested in. But I do like the concluding equation.
Essay 4 -- This moment is filled solely with music, it's a time to relax and enjoy the atmosphere around me. Either add a conjunction or separate into 2 different sentences.
