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LGBT. The communities you belong to. Michigan Ann Arbor


coldmountain 1 / 1  
Jan 29, 2014   #1
Essay #1 (Required for all applicants. Approximately 250 words)
Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it.

As soon as I entered SYSU, I joined the Rainbow Society, which is the first LGBT organization in Chinese universities. There, we share a common mission: taking endeavor to build up an unbiased society. Together we have successfully organized various LGBT campaigns such as a series lecture about gender pluralism, the LGBTQ Pride Month and the Rainbow Open-air Concert, which gain great publicity and positive response.

Through the contact with the sexual minorities, I found my perspective to LGBT groups sublimed. I used to consider myself unbiased while I actually had some stereotypes in my mind. For instance, I once held that much of discrimination to gay people derive from those who lack masculinity such as drag queens. But my points were challenged by the pioneer of Taiwan's gay rights movement, Ka Fei, who asked why we consider gays or men must be masculine to be "proper" and strongly attributed such discrimination to the entrenched prejudice of gender binary. Working with the feminism teachers in the society such as Song Sufeng and Ke Qianting, I then found the similar immanent conception of social gender abounding in contemporary society, which accelerates the discrimination toward sexual minority. Hence I felt it vital to promote the gender and sexual orientation equality, and break down the restriction of bias from society even myself.

What's more, during my year working as a volunteer in the society I am infected by the unremitting efforts of my peers to eliminate the discrimination towards sexual minority groups. I believe that everyone can take one tiny step to erase the alienations in our society.

this is due the day after tomorrow and I think my essay is silly :( please help
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 29, 2014   #2
Through the contact with the sexual minorities, I found my perspective to LGBT groups sublimed.

I think you need to be a bit more elaboration here. It is not clear what sort of minorities you talk about and how those contacts did happen. I guess you talk about the minorities with different sexual orientations. However, you better present this idea more lively, may be through an experience you had. Your answer contains lots of information, but lacks emotional appeal in its presentation. If you work on that this would be a great answer.
OP coldmountain 1 / 1  
Jan 30, 2014   #3
Thanks! I wanted to say that I had contact with them during the activities I mentioned above because we organized them together, so this information is not clear...I will try to adjust it.

The emotion part is a big problem*cry* maybe I need to delete some information so that I have space to write more about my feelings...


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