"Don't wish it were easier, wish you were better. Don't wish for fewer problems, wish for more skills. Don't wish for less challenges, wish for more wisdom." ~ Earl Shoaf
Life has hit me with a lot of hardships. It has hit me with things that I never thought I would face. I came home one day from school to find that the electricity in my house off. I was expecting this to occur because my mother did not have a job and the bills were just piling up on each other. Every month another late fee added to each bill. That night my brother, my sister, and my mother and I lit candles all over the place so that we could see around the house (we had many episodes of running into the walls). As I sat by the candle doing my homework, I became frustrated. I asked myself the common question "Why me?" I began to think "why am I even doing this assignment, I'm sure this would be the perfect excuse to give a teacher besides the familiar my dog ate my homework." I placed my unfinished homework inside my text booked and slammed it shut as if I was condemning it to hell and I walked away from it. By taking this action I believed I was taking the easy way out. Nonetheless I kept thinking why should I let my issues get the best of me. Things are not going to get easier than they are now so I just have to learn to be better. I got my textbook and my homework assignment, went to my neighborhood pool and sat under light to do my homework. I kept this up for about three months.
"Don't wish it were easier, wish you were better...."
I would like to say that we got help and things got better, unfortunately that wasn't the case. Things actually got worse. Instead of just having my electricity turned off, my water was turned off as well. When this happened it felt as if someone placed the world on my shoulders. We figured out a way to get our water from the pool to use for bathing and flushing. Sometimes we showered at our neighbors' house or we would put buckets outside to catch the rain water. We kept this up for about two months.
"Don't wish for less challenges, wish for more wisdom."
We were finally evicted out of our house on December 14th, 2010. We managed to find a place to stay in Miami. Even though we went through all that, I believe I came out of that obstacle a stronger and wiser person. It's easy to complain and ask why. It's easy to wish for less challenges but it's hard to look past it all and still work hard at school. It takes a lot strength to motivate yourself when it seems like there is no reason to be happy. Going through this misfortune made me wish for more wisdom. It showed me that dark times will come, but you just have to keep pushing. Time goes on and you just have to keep your head up high and move along with it.
It takes a lot strength to motivate yourself when it seems like there is no reason to be happy. Going through this misfortune made me wish for more wisdom. It showed me that dark times will come, but you just have to keep pushing. Time goes on and you just have to keep your head up high and move along with it.
Perhaps you should not use 'you' and instead opt for 'one'. It could be annoying for adcoms if they are being directly addressed as 'you'. Anyway that is my opinion.
Another thing that I would like to suggest is that you should perhaps end in basic personal theme.
I find a saying very relevant in your case- Let's pray for for stronger shoulders than lighter loads.
Every month another late fee was added to each bill.
Well, for whatever it is worth, you are not the only student who had to cope with an electricity or gas shutoff. I did, too! In this competitive society, the forces we are up against will take all the money we have sometimes! It is hard...
Comma, and capitalize:
I began to think, "W hy am I even doing this assignment? I'm sure this would be the perfect
Instead of just having my electricity turned off, my water was turned off as well. ---oh, no!!! I bet you will be more aware of the need for stable income than your peers who never experiences cold showers!
I believe I came out of that obstacle a stronger and wiser person. ---I bet you did! And I like the quote you used in this essay. I like the way you used it.