Born and brought up in India, I have never had an opportunity to choose the subject of my curriculum, as the government has always decided for me. (It's up to you, but I think you don't need to add this information.)
Studying at Macalester would allow me to combine my passions for Biology, Psychology and Human rights
and at the same time.
extensive traveller(Only people who travel a lot will call themselves traveller) , I knew I would only (Wouldn't that mean you won't fit in another college?) fit in well in a college with diversity. As an international student, (You don't need to restate it) my parents are scared about me attending a college in a foreign land, and it gives them a relief to know that the city where Mac is located is amongst the safest cities in U.S.A, as listed by the Forbes magazine.
To me, giving back to the community always comes first. (Bring this sentence behind and change the structure like: since... or something like that. The other alternative is to change the sentence after this to become: and Mac's unique... fits me perfectly) Mac has a unique orientation tradition known as "Into the Streets," in which members of each first-year course go into the Twin Cities community to see how their course topic connects to the Cities.
I can see myself spending my next 4 years in Macalester College,
I still have many jellybeans describing why I and Mac are perfect for each other. (It disconnects 2 sentences around it.) In my eyes, Macalester College is the right place to go to find this group of people.
Well, the essay itself is quiet interesting, the analogy is unique and each part makes me want to read the next one. Keep up the good work!