I like learning. In fact, I love learning. But, school? That's a different story.
Got to get efficient. Modern readers have tiny attention spans.
I like learning. In fact, I love learning, but school? That's a different story.
...should
be an experience that has inculcated all my interests, and not a generic number churned out of a computer. (you need another sentence here in order to make your point)
At Brown, I am given the freedom to grow into a better person and scholar by nurturing my interests in a broad area of subjects. I am given the responsibility of my education in which I am to find a delicate balance between maturity and exploration, delve into various interdisciplinary subjects, and incorporate don't waste words with these generalities. You could say the same of any school, not just Brown.
This is the interesting part: my studies (or interests?) in the cultural (Indian classical music and dance), scientific, and historical realms to produce an individualistic and holistic education.
The tight-knit community of students doesn't compete against each other, don't talk about a tight knit community... and yes they do compete with each other!
Keep these words in there! They are brilliant: but abet in each other's didactical journey. --- very cool words... but the rest of their sentence has to get the ax!
At Brown, I don't have to be a number or a letter. I can be myself.---maybe, but what makes Brown so different from other schools in that regard. And do you really just want a general education, or are you passionate about a particular subject? Impress them with your plans for the future!