I used to look at her as a simply tenacious woman to whom I aspired to be like; I still do, only now with greater understanding.
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T he years pass, as she helps her mother to keep the family farm afloat and care for her younger sister and brother.
Careful with your tenses in the second paragraph, towards the end.
Much like any epilogue, spin-off, or remake,
^^ choose one, not all three.
I feel like you don't talk about yourself enough! Remember, they want to know about YOU. If you would rather not change it, you can simply add more to it about yourself and your home situation. Parallel it and use direct verbs to connect your grandmother's life to yours. The entire last paragraph should be about yourself and only yourself. It should show the ultimate impact it has made on you, how it has made you who you are. Be specific; give examples, but make sure they are about you! Hope that helps. Good luck!