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I like to sleep, but I love to stay up late; Babson Supplement: Letter to Roommate

lulwut 5 / 26 1  
Dec 23, 2012   #1
Please give me your harshest review! Don't tell me you like it so that I might feel inclined to look at your essay; Instead be as constructive as possible to save both your time and mine. Thanks in advance!

Write a letter to your first-year roommate at Babson. Tell him or her what it will be like to live with you, why you chose Babson, and what you are looking forward to the most in college. (No word limit.)

Dear Future Roommate,

Hello! My name is Marco and I'll be your roommate starting this fall. I'll take this opportunity to tell you a little about myself, though I expect we'll learn much more about each other in the future.

I'm a fairly neat type of person. I like to sleep, but I love to stay up late. People who know me well might call me a perfectionist, but I like to think that I just challenge myself. I'm addicted to creating things, from computer programs to secret handshakes. I might seem a little nerdy at times, but I enjoy playing sports and being physically active. When it comes to music, I listen to many genres, so I'm pretty open to listening to what other's like. I like to experiment and I try to learn new things often. I could go on with this list of characteristics, but I would rather show you once I see you.

The reason I chose to apply to Babson is that I am drawn to its expertise in teaching using actual experience. I believe that there is no better way to learn than to do, so it seemed to me that it was a good fit for my personality. I plan to major in entrepreneurship, which played a major role in my decision to apply here. I have always been one to work hard for what I am passionate about, and I enjoy taking risks and making decisions, so I believe that having this major at Babson would provide me with the perfect opportunity to pursue my aim of entrepreneurship.

Once I get into college, I am most eager to experience the many courses I will be taking that are more intellectually stimulating than classes I have had in high school. Nothing animates me more than a challenge, so I am glad to have been accepted into a college that is known for its difficult courses. I'm excited to meet you and see what you are like as well. I hope that we can become friends and get along well as roommates.

Best regards,

Marco Giancarli

sticknstones - / 11 5  
Dec 24, 2012   #2
I liked it. I think it did a great job at balancing why you want to attend Babson and who you are as a student and individual
OP lulwut 5 / 26 1  
Dec 26, 2012   #3
I was hoping for something a little more critical than that! Were there parts that didn't flow well to you? Was it too short/too wordy? Did it seem boring or predictable in any way?

I'll be sure to give my best criticism in return for any good reviews. Thanks in advance.

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