It has some grammatical issues, but I think this is a good option to go with. Some of the facts you gave were entertaining and fun, but what you gave was a list. "I am this, I do that,..." as entertaining as it was, you do run the risk of an admissions officer not liking it because you're just listing off qualities, but in my opinion, it is well-written enough to pass off as genuine essay because so much of yourself (or at least who I think you are) that you can't find on your application came through.
If there is something I am curious about, I try to learn about it.
But even with this correction, you still use the word "about" twice and too close to each other. I would recommend revising the sentence as a whole.
I am different, well weird.
I can see that you're trying to do a pause here, but pauses like what I think you're trying to achieve don't translate well to the written form. Plus, I don't that I gain much from this sentence at all.
I like to move around and can't sit still for
over maybe(pick one of these to use) four hours.
"My name is Annabell Brien,
and I'm 17, and a senior in high school. I'm a quirky, bubbly teenager and I likewho likes music and food. I love involvement and hope to pursue my passions and further explore myself at Yale."
Good luck to you!