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'I want to live and learn for myself' - UC ESSAY: PROMPT 1


kimchiduck 2 / 4  
Nov 27, 2012   #1
Prompt 1: Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

Growing up I was never the kid who disobeyed their parents. I was the girl you would refer to as the "good girl." The girl who always did what their parents expected and never dared to disobey. What my parents wished was my desire and what they planned was my future. My motivation was my parents, until I found a dream that I wanted to achieve.

Before I found this dream, school to me was just a daily routine and grades were just meaningless letters. I was working towards an unknown future my parents had already planned for me. My parents being very strict and pushy about school and grades I was forced to start tutor at the age of eleven. Although, I disliked it at first after some time I enjoyed meeting new friends and getting extra help on subjects I had trouble on. However, each tutor did not last long. Once entered into a tutor program my parents would instantly switch to a newer program if they had a "better learning system" or "higher proven test grades." My schedule always being school, tutor, and then home I had no control over what I wanted to do or learn. Being so dependent on my parents, I often wondered what it would be like to have control over my life; to make my own decisions, to be responsible for my own mistakes without having my parents getting involved, and ultimately to decide and have a dream for myself. Unlike many others my age I wanted to be experience the life of an independent mature adult. Not knowing my plans for my future I decided to accept the fact that I was just going to live up to the usual expectations of my parents. After all, being the "good girl" my whole life, it was unimaginable for me to walk towards a different road then my parents had planned. But through a community service experience, I was tempted to experience life on the other road. However, being the scared and unconfident person I was, my dreams were always kept in an imaginary box in the back of my mind. As this imaginary box became bigger and bigger so did my passion for this dream. I asked myself why not me?

Finally one day after a quote I read from my friend's phone this imaginary box exploded and inspired to pursue this dream. I decided to tell my parents about this dream that I had been hiding. I finally I realized I do not want to live and learn for my parents but for myself. Talking to my parents was the best thing I could have done for my future. Although, it was very small part of my journey it was the most significant so far. Not only was it when I realized and tested the independence and courage I had in me but it was also the first time I willingly fought for something I wanted. This short encounter with my parents was the hardest and scariest event but through this event I gained so much. I gained motivation to do better in school for only my benefit. I realized and found the new self I thought never existed in me but most importantly I found a dream. As I graduate high school, I am always going to remember that one quote by James Dean that opened my eyes to the world I never thought could exist. "I can't change the direction of the wind, but I can adjust my sails to always reach my destination."
mhanna 3 / 7 1  
Nov 27, 2012   #2
Your essay flows nicely, but you write about a "community service experience" yet, you don't continue with that idea, how it influenced you, or what it is.

Also, please critique my Common App Short Answer on Graphic Design. Thank you!
OP kimchiduck 2 / 4  
Nov 27, 2012   #3
I actually purposely did it cause my prompt 2 is all about my community service experience but i'll add to it just in case! Thanks!


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