In my opinion, between living and dreaming, there is inspiration. Without inspiration, no matter how long you live, you are unable to dream because there is nothing to inspire you to dream about something. When you are living, things around you play a big role in inspiring you. Only the living knows how to find the inspiration to dream.
For instance, when you face a problem in living, you tend to figure out how to fix it. That problem inspires you to find a solution and indirectly causes you to dream. Dream is like imagining things to what you want it to be. With inspiration, you can dream anything you want to.
If you have a perfect life, you'll look around you and you'll soon realise that you are unable to dream. This is because there is no inspiration for you to dream. Everything is as it should be; it is as if you are living the dream. Why would you dream about something that is already going your own way? People only dream when they want something to be the way they desire.
Inspiration is important, without it, the world would be just the same. The Wright brothers wouldn't have invented the aeroplane if the birds hadn't inspired them. Seeing the birds flying, made them dream about inventing something that would enable us humans to fly. Thanks to inspiration, we now have thousands of inventions to make our life easier. Without inspiration, living and dreaming are just two ordinary words.
This is just a draft, I hope you guys can comment, as harsh as possible, so that I could rewrite a better one!
I think you spell realise with z instead of s . "Only the living knows how to find the inspiration to dream." without the s
"when you face a problem in living ... " I think it's better to replace living with something like 'life' 'real life' or 'reality'
I'm not quite sure what the prompt is. It is a good essay overall but I think you should try to make it a bit more personal
Yeah, I agree with ka19921, you should make it more personal. The college just wants to know about you really so instead of giving Wright brothers as an example, give a situation where you yourself had used inspiration.
"Without inspiration, no matter how long you live, you are unable to dream because there is nothing to inspire you to dream about something."
Sounds a bit redundant, I think. Maybe say, "No matter how long you live, you won't be able to dream if there is nothing to inspire you." Or something like that, I'm sure you could come up with a better sentence.
Just make it more personal and it would be a great essay, keep it up! :)
Your essay seems good but I think you should make it more personal as stated above. Also, I think the word "dream" is repeated quite often in the third paragraph. Could you put in some other word instead of dream or rephrase the sentences?
Dream is like imagining
Also, I think it should be dreaming instead of dream. i might be wrong though. Good luck :)
oh and I made a mistake, this is for UChic essay.
