when I look in the mirror, besides seeing my reflection I would see this girl, who was not content with herself. She never knew the meaning of love or the importance of family. For most of her life, being alone was something that was normal to her. She loved being in school though. She felt as if it was more like her home. There were always people she could talk to.
I start seeing the obstale she goes through. She was suspected of being mentally slow due to a diagnosis of a learning disability. Her fear was not living up to what everyone expected her to become: bright and intelligent. She was taken out of regular classes and put into Special Ed.
She would sit in the back row unfocused to understand what the teacher was talking about. But, as days went by she started to adjust and show improvement. She stayed focused by sitting in the front row. With impressive grades, she was taken out of Special Ed for good. Entering high school she felt ecstatic. As a freshman, she was on the path of finding herself. She explored different fields such as Drama, Music and Art.
While looking in the mirror, I noticed how weak she became. Her sophmore and junior year was riddled with stress, frustration and poor achievement. Experiencing a multitude of failures, she then developed low self-esteem. From that point on, she started giving up on life and herself.
When I see this girl, I begin to see a different person unfold. Entering her last year of high school, for an easy grade she picked one sucessful person to write about. She chose Whoopi Goldberg. Researching about her life, she learned that Whoopi goldberg had a learning disability. She realized if Whoopi can get through it, then she can too. Giving up was no longer an option to her. She decided to make a change.
She started setting goals for herself and creating a game plan to make them happen. One of them were getting better at writing. She stayed after school with her english teacher most days so can get evaluated on her strengths and weaknesses in writing. With help, patience and diligence her writing became creative and distinctive. She was able to manage her disability. While in her classes, she alwayed asked questions if she didn't understand something. She saw challenges as a detour rather than a roadblock.
As far as being around people, she joined a program called "Future 5." She interacted with other students and all of the coaches who were one-hundred percent supportive of her future.With the support she started to have, she felt fortunate and encouraged saying, "You can fight this Shirley!" From there on, she was more motivated than she ever was in her entire life.
Outside of school, she also did community service. She wanted to be able to provide others with what she never had: love, compassion and strength.
Through her struggle, she learned it's okay to be different. She realized it wasn't her condition that was the problem, she was to weak to fight through it alone. With Whoopi Goldberg as her inspiration, she felt blissful that she wasn't the only one born with it. Seeing how much this girl grows, made me realize how much were both alike. When I look in the mirror, I see this girl, I recognize this girl, I am this girl, and she was me.
I like the last sentence a lot:)
I think it is good, albeit a bit negative. Also, try to make sure you keep it all in one tense. Either all in 'she has' or 'she is' or 'she was'.
