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I was a really loquacious kid. Common application essay 1st topic


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Dec 11, 2014   #1
prompt: Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.

I was a really loquacious kid. I always buried my parents with odd questions and desperately tried to find answers. A simple conversation between us would go something like this "Why these trees are green? - Because it is summer-What is summer?"

Having wanted to know more, I started to read books. The more I read, the more I interested in books. I, even, tried to memorize historical facts and names of different capital cities. Although it seemed really strange, I really loved to do these stuffs. As a time goes by, I entered in secondary school. Due to lots of hard assignments, I eventually reduced my time for books. Moreover, I was bored to just read. Indeed, I wanted more creative works. At this time, I had just finished "Traveling to the Moon" by Jules Verne which was my first and last science novel. The plan, firing wagon with 3 people to the Moon, was very simple yet elegant. That was the first time that I was ever admired human beings great imagination and ambition.

Wanting to understand more about accurate details of this plan, I began reading physics articles, further decided to attend physics class. I learnt basic physics concepts which were enough to understand this plan; however I wanted to deepen my knowledge of science. I, finally, found a really creative work, in my view. When I finished new lesson, I always wanted to learn another one. Finally, I began to compete in local physics Olympiads. Because I thought class lessons were not enough, I started to solve independently previous Olympiad problems which had only answers. But, this type of learning had one weakness. When I could not solve problems, I just saw answers and invented new nebulous methods. However, most interestingly, these methods used to work very well in local competitions. Hence, I convinced that I knew physics well. As a result, I only had bunch of formulas which I did not know the real meaning. When someone asked me a physics question, I could not answer because I only knew formulas. That was an absolute wrong way to learn physics. Therefore, I decided to attend to higher level class in National University of Mongolia.

After seeing our professor's awesome techniques to deal with mathematics as well as physics problems, I was really admired. These skills were completely different from my limited methods. Moreover, his physics lectures went to the very core of it. It was a really interesting to know deep meaning of formulas. Some lectures were so confusing that they directly contradicted to my previous false knowledge. Simple subjects were becoming more complex and paradoxical. But when I understood them, I felt blissful. Finally, I was selected one of the International Physics Olympiad team. In addition to taking this class, I began reading college physics books, watching several open courses of US universities, and taking some EDX courses. Especially, college books were very exciting because it included not only physics interesting phenomenon, but also great part scientist's contribution to the physics. For instance, And also, courses were so effective and quite exciting. Sometimes I needed to spend 10 hours per day, yet I did not feel tired. I was really interested in physics at this time. If I did another subject with great amount of time, I would not tolerate.

These years were precious of my life. Physics became something that I always love and talk. When strangers talk about physics, I try to find a way to discuss them. I could not even describe my compassion toward science, especially physics. Although I only learnt really tiny piece of science, I strongly believe that this knowledge will help me to explore more.
katetan 2 / 4  
Dec 11, 2014   #2
I think your essay is more like a "WHY"essay. You talk about why you are interested in physics and what you have done to achieve a higher level.

But you didn't mention a lot about "background" and "your identity". The propose of this essay is to enable the readers of your application to know about you apart from courses, grades, and test scores. Maybe you can mention more about who you are and how these years shaped your personality. :)

I hope this will help.
Also,would you please take your time and help me on my essay? I am also an applicant this year and I will really appreciate your help.


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