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Just like how a year dies and a new year is born, my love for Hamilton College was instantaneous. Attracted to Hamilton upon first site in my college search, I was compelled to explore what the school actually held. It was then I realized my attraction to Hamilton was genuine and it was the place where I should be.
I believe Hamilton is the place which can help me nurture my dream due to its tolerance. A school which gives students a voice, Hamilton presents an open educational curriculum and challenges the faculties of students in their academic field. Students have the free option to choose courses they believe they can thrive, and the small class size with students fewer than twenty as well as a student to faculty ratio of nine is to one, students are almost assured to learn a great deal from each lesson. The small class size i believe will also create a healthy relationship between students and lecturers, thus students can exploit a great deal of knowledge from them which prepares the Hamilton student to face the challenges of the world as well finding solutions to them.
Hamilton with its rural setting merged with its racial diversity presents a culturally assimilated atmosphere where students can learn cultures from one another. Its Greek life also introduces its students to some ancient experience.
I being an individual who advocate strongly for tolerance in all spheres of life, I couldn't have chosen a more perfect match. I believe at Hamilton all my abilities will be refined through intensive class work and extracurricular activities and I can almost be certain to obtain a solid foundation on which I can build my future of being a neurosurgeon. Being a person who also loves to learn a lot about different cultures the atmosphere at Hamilton will just be sublime.