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"For the Love of Physics" by Professor of Physics Walter Lewin in is one of the best books that I ever come across and one of the best inspiration lectures that I ever watched. As I began attending high-school, Lewin's lectures transform my life as they made physics not only accessible but fun,
whether swinging with a pendulum ball to prove that mass has no effect on period, beating a student to create electric charges,...
-... books that I have
ever... best inspirational
lectures... Lewis lectures transformed
Lewin took me
to a fabulous trip , opened my eyes as never before to the wonders of physics while simply reading a book.
- ... took me on
a fabulous trip and ...
my way to the path of scientific exploration
- ... led me to
so that I could enjoy science and entertainment.
that I could...
I asked myself: Why can we snorkel no deeper than about one foot below the surface? Why are the colors of a rainbow always in the same order?
Why pendulum ball have the same period whatever its mass?How can a flea be strong enough to pull a book?
It brought me to observe
, analyze and problems in daily life as a scientific matte r, worth studying as more than a simple task.
- ... to observe and analyze
,that include interviews
- that included
give me a quenched answer about what does
- and gave
me an answer to the question
- ... into gigantic
I get so revolutionary ideas that become as a chore in my life.
- I developed revolutionary ideas that became a focal point of my life.
- First, look at criticisms as advantages instead of setbacks. If people challenge you, then prove them wrong. Increased effort and devotion to work will eventually pay off.
First, is to take criticism as an advantage not as a setback. If people challenge your pursuit , take the chance prove to them the contraire , increase your effort and devote more of attention to your exciting work " Second, is boosting complex thinking by bringing the entire range of human possibilities within myself
-... boost complex thinking by challenging yourself to think outside the box and imagine far beyond what the human mind can normally conceive.
Third, - Third and most important, capture moments and opportunities to prove the worth of your life, be it the euphoria of a successful experiment or successfully answering a given equation.
which is the most important is that one should capture moments or opportunities that make life worth living which can be materialized by the Euphoria after a successful experiment or a founding so that one can enrich not only scientific field but also go farther by giving a value to people's life .
- These books offered me a globalist point of view regarding scientific fields. These authors helped me develop an in-depth analysis of creativity and science. Through these books, I came to understand the need to cultivate creativity as scientific entertainment. If science is not eventually considered entertainment, the future of the world may be altered in a negative manner.
These books by its globalist view regarding scientific field is completely an in-depth analysis of creativity and science. Through I understand why creativity needs to be cultivated as scientific entertainment and is necessary for the future of The U.S, if not the world.
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