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I love telling jokes! - CommonApp essay #1


whatsmynamee 1 / -  
Oct 14, 2011   #1
Why does a seagull fly over the sea?
Because if it flew over the bay, it would be called a bagel!


Human connection is the pathway to exposing one's soul. I make connections by telling jokes, making them a part of who I am.

On a typical day at school, I share jokes related to my classes.

What is the dullest element? Bohrium!

During lunch, I animatedly exchange corny jokes in between bites.

What's a bear without teeth? A gummy bear!

At home, I attempt to amuse my friends with funny Facebook statuses.

World War II was slow to recover because it kept Stalin around.

Every day, I tell jokes that only I find amusing. Some people stare while others nod with a lackluster chuckle. It's discouraging when nobody shares my sense of humor, and at times, I feel like an oddity amongst others.

This feeling of peculiarity significantly changed last year at my annual church retreat when a lack of housing required my youth group to be stuck in a conference room for hours. Noticing our agitation, the coordinator asked if anyone knew a good joke to lighten the mood. My friends looked towards me, expecting me to jump at the opportunity.

Although hesitant by the unenthusiastic responses I regularly received in the past, I volunteered and walked up to the stage. Embarrassment and humiliation began to flow through my veins, amplified due to the added pressure of a large audience. Taking a deep breath, I stood on stage for a moment with the stunningly bright lights on my skin. Then, with a nervous sweat rushing over my hands, I slowly approached the microphone and was greeted by hundreds of awaiting eyes.

"Did you hear about the two antennas that got married on a roof?
The ceremony wasn't much, but I hear the reception was excellent!"


Silence chased away a few faint chuckles, filled the room, and lingered. Expressionless faces revealed what I feared: another stale joke. Helplessly, I began to laugh; at least I thought my joke was funny. Suddenly, my friends began to laugh too. Others joined in. The coordinator began to clap and soon, the room filled with laughter and applause. I no longer saw anguished or restless faces, but ones filled with delight.

In that moment, I realized it was not my joke that caused people to applaud, but the effort I put into making others smile. It's true: I always try to make light of tense situations by cheering people up with my jokes. I have gained a new sense of confidence in myself and that assurance has even helped me start a club at school. My unique sense of humor reveals my cheerful personality and allows me to be comfortable around all types of people and in all kinds of situations. With the pleasure of witnessing the smiles I help create, I continue to spread the joy, one joke at a time.
ckpckp1994 8 / 17 2  
Oct 14, 2011   #2
You got an unique opening, but it takes me a few seconds to follow you thought at first because I didn't know the first line was a joke. May be you want to put line 2 as your first line.

I also like how you described the situation that you were in. I can picture it in my head, so kudos to you!
seni012 3 / 14  
Oct 14, 2011   #3
This is a pretty unique topic, so good job on selecting that! The imagery provided is great as well. I had no problem understanding that the first line was a joke (i think the italics signify it pretty well). The only problem I had was the tone. I would refrain from using sentences like, "at least I thought my jokes were funny" or "It's discouraging that no one shares my sense of humor". Those lines makes it feel as if its the audience is at fault. Instead maybe you could use, "It's discouraging when my jokes are not received well" or something to that effect. Otherwise, pretty good!
tleeoh 1 / 1  
Oct 14, 2011   #4
You got an unique opening, but it takes me a few seconds to follow you thought at first because I didn't know the first line was a joke. May be you want to put line 2 as your first line. I also like how you described the situation that you were in. I can picture it in my head, so kudos to you!

Thank you guys :) I put both your advice into consideration and am making some changes.

And for anyone reading, I'm still open to advice on grammar, content, etc


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