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I want to make a difference and leave the most positive impact on the world - activities

madisongreen 2 / 8  
Aug 28, 2013   #1
PROMPT: Considering your lifetime goals, discuss how your current and future academic and extra-curricular activities might help you achieve your goals.

No matter what I decide to do with the rest of my life, I want to make a difference and leave the most positive impact on the world that I possibly can. In order to do this I have been working hard academically, and I have been participating in numerous extra-curricular activities inside and outside of school.

One area that has really helped me in my ability to reach my goal would be academics. Throughout high school, I have taken more difficult courses in an effort to learn as much as I can. Most of my classes are AP classes and dual credit classes. These classes have a much more accelerated curriculum and have required a lot of hard work for me to be successful. This increased exertion has been well worth it because I have been able to greatly improve my abilities in all areas of school, while learning far more than my other classmates that have taken less rigorous coursework. Another academic opportunity I have taken is my participation in UIL academic competitions. My competing in Accounting and Headline Writing has offered me yet more opportunities to expand my talents and improve them. Taking these opportunities in competitions and the classroom has required a great deal of dedication on my part. Proof of my dedication to academic excellence can be seen through my accomplishments and awards. I received the class awards for both Physics and Accounting, and have also been a part of the Accounting Team went to the Regional UIL Tournament for 2 years in a row. The accomplishment I am most proud of is my acceptance into my school's chapter of the National Honor's Society. My membership holds me to a higher standard of excellence that I use as motivation to continue striving for my ultimate goal of having a positive impact on society.

My extra-curricular activities have also aided me in pursuing my goal. My participation in Student Council and other organizations in which I am an officer has taught me valuable, life-long lessons in leadership and collaboration. These assets and others have also been developed through my participation in my schools volleyball, basketball, and tennis programs. Through sports I have learned the incredible feats that can be accomplished through hard work, self-discipline, and teamwork. I have never understood this better than when our varsity volleyball team won the game leading to the Regional Tournament Championship, or when a couple fellow students and I created a new organization (Business Club) that is still flourishing today. My activities not only have shown me the strength of many, however, but have taught me the power of one. Through my community service I have seen first-hand the impact one person can make on another's life, especially through a great organization called Meals on Wheels. Giving meals to people in desperate need has touched my heart and taught me a lesson in humility. It reminds me of just how fortunate I am to be able to help others, despite the sacrifice of time it often takes to do so. The overall sacrifice of participating in these activities inside and outside of school has been well worth it. I have learned so many life lessons and have greatly improved my own character along the way, helping me to pave the way to reaching my future goal.

An important aspect of reaching my future goal of having an impact on the world involves deciding how I am going to make this impact. I have been researching the subject for months and, taking into account my own strengths and passions and have decided to act. I participated in a program at Oklahoma State University called Discover Architecture over this past summer, and it gave me an insightful look into the fields of architecture, landscape architecture, architectural engineering, and construction science. Through this experience I have discovered that I do have a passion and aptitude for both architecture and engineering fields, and I have looked further into finding universities with these departments. I have so far made a visit to Texas A&M and plan to visit other colleges in the future, but haven't been able to make arrangements yet due to my busy schedule. Throughout the entire process I find myself feeling more and more confident in my decisions about my future, that my goal is in my own power to control. I feel that I am beginning to embark on the journey that is required in reaching the goal that I have been working so hard for, and I am elated to be finally taking the first step.

Please post any input you may have about my essay. It would be much appreciated.
sarthakjain 19 / 58  
Aug 31, 2013   #2
Overall I think the essay is straight to the point, but in academic section I find it more of a laundry list without much insight. If you are using common app, Your activites above would already be listed in Activities section . I suggest to focus on one or two activity in each section of your essay and describe in detail how it affected you. Also, the ending needs to be a little more emphatic.
sr005307 1 / 2  
Sep 1, 2013   #3

you are amazing.

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