"Oh my god, Yejin, look over there! Isn't that guy hot?" my mother loudly screeched. I smacked my forehead for the billionth time as my mother gaped at the poor student biking past. Thus began my first encounter with the school that became more than just a brand name, more than my mother's fantasies. During my campus visit, I knew I had an interest in biology, but assumed all top universities to be similar in approach to the field. Upon further research, I found that Stanford exceeded my expectations. The list of faculty is an impressive feat in itself, but I am particularly impressed by Martha Cyert's research on gene expression in yeast cells. Alternate gene expression in response to environmental stress is delightedly in sync with my own research interests. Attempts at bioremediation are often unsuccessful due to the inhospitable conditions in which the organisms are placed, and further understanding of adaptation and gene expression is a possible solution for this roadblock. Stanford's opportunity for research in this particular focus, as well as numerous others, exudes an appeal that is hard to resist.
Of course, I cannot be completely satisfied with the scientific aspect of my education. The humanities retain an intricate bond with my own philosophical musings, making Stanford an ideal place for a student torn between literature and the sciences. I have a firm belief that curiosity should spark answers, no matter what discipline. Woe the day when I am unable to participate in a discussion about Salinger's works. Stanford provides both the liberal arts education I desire and the research opportunity I crave. So, sorry Mom; I neither care for the brand name, nor the "hot boys". I want a lasting relationship with Stanford, one that involves active participation and a constant thirst for understanding.
please be harsh. I need to cut some words and my grammar is lacking. General comments needed as well!
but assumed all top universities to be similar in approach to the field.
-that part is somewhat confusing at first
but other than that, I don't really know what you should cut out! Your essay portrays you positively in the intellectual sense and is also quite interesting. Your mom is funny. haha
