People have different ideas abaout their lifestyles and desires. While some part of people want to live in wealth others just want to live in a good conditions and peaceful athmosphre.Everybody feel to free themsevles to choose their own wishes. There are two main characteristics human behaviours, that first one is making large amounts of money and second one is being satisfied to earn a comfortable living.
Firstly,some kind of people want to live in wealth and they work without any limitation. They just think that they can reach hapiness via affluence. Howeever they are not aware of their fault and how the life is short to be very ambitious. They sole understand their fault on the verge of death.
Secondly,there are another kind of people who are satisfied with their owns and have great knowledge about being happy. They are aware of how the life is short and how the time passes quickly, so living in comfortable condition during their life, is enough satisfactory for them.
In this case, we can emphasize about human desires and axpectation from life. We all know that we cannot judge anybody of their wishes. However, people should live their pleasures and If they learn to thank they can obtain many advanteges from life even these acquires can be more than they imagine. So, I think being satisfied and being happy with your owns are best things in this life, because there is no end for people desires. Being satisfied is a fundemental key of human pleasure life. In conclusion, I would like to say this, there is no importance to have half of an earth, this is merely illustration of this mortal life, the most significant think to be satisfied your own specialities, If people think in this point of view, this brings happiness naturally and eventually.
You have problems with spelling. You should revise it before you post it here for other people to give feedbacks.
You may have troubles when using structures. I tried but I couldn't understand some of your sentences.
Basically, your ideas are good, however, you didn't make good use of/satisfy the functions of the intro & conclusion.
What is the topic of the essay, pls? :|
Dear Yin,
Thank you for your correction, I have some problem about spelling and supporting ideas. I am going to write new essays soon. I am going to concern about my mistakes.
Ok, just post it here and I hope that I can help you with something :D
I'll give some ideas, too, in case it is helpful...
Everybody should feel to free to be themsevles to take action based on their own wishes. There are two main characteristics motivations for human behaviour: that first one is making large amounts of money, and second one is being satisfied to earn a comfortable living.
Firstly, some kinds of people want to live...
Secondly,there are other kinds of people who are satisfied with their owns enough to live peacefully, and these are the kinds of people with great knowledge about being happy.
In conclusion, I would like to say this: there is no importance to have having all the wealth on earth; this is merely illustration of this mortal life. The most significant thing is to be satisfied with your own specialities abilities and level of wealth. If people think from this point of view, this brings happiness naturally and eventually.
