I'm a university student from China,English is my second language.I'm applying for the program of Mandarin Language volunteer in New Zealand.While writing this statement,I was not sure about the grammar and sentence structure.HOPE YOU CAN DO ME A FAVOR! THANK YOU SO MUCH! (here is the part of my statement)
During the period of Feb. to Jul.in 2015,I was recommended as the exchange student to study in National Taiwan Normal University. There, I was intensely aware of the the importance of communication since I met people from all over the world, sharing cultural similarities and differences. The time we strolled along the campus trail or made pottery in the workshop is quite memorable,which also made me more open-minded toward other types of culture.
Thus in order to prepare for this position,I have browsed the web of Confucius Institute at Victoria University to get a complete picture of the program.Moreover,as a student of non-Chinese language or non-overseas education department, I have found it necessary to prosecute a search for the knowledge of contemporary Chinese language in the library.In addition,to hold a better organized class,I've consulted with my teacher about making lesson plans and learning teaching methods.Besides,knowledge knows no bounds.It's a long race in the way of improving my teaching skills but I will keep studying as well as bring up confidence.
Language volunteer is the key to the door of cultural communicating,through which to show the world a more realistic and diverse China.I feel eternal grateful for the beauty that life have given me,but it's always been a regret that I couldn't have an in-depth study of Chinese. When I read the program Introduction of being a Mandarin Language Assistant in New Zealand where I have been longing for several years,I was thinking whether all the cultural skills and knowledge I learned before are aimed to meet the arrival of such an opportunity.
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Language volunteer is the key to the door of cultural communicating,through which to show the world a more realistic and diverse China is shown to the world .I feel eternally [not sure what you mean] grateful for the beauty that life have given me,but it'sit is always been a regret that I couldn't have an in-depth study of Chinese. When I read the program Introduction of being a Mandarin Language Assistant in New Zealand where I have been longing for to several yearsnot sure what you mean. long for going to New Zealand or the job? you can't long for A PLACE ,I was thinking whether all the cultural skills and knowledge I learned before are aimed to meet the arrival of such an opportunity or not .
other than grammar, you tell us little about yourself. You should be more individual and unique in your essay
Bian, before any grammar corrections are made to your essay, we first need to know what it is that you are supposed to write about. I am sure that this essay came with some instructions from the university right? Kindly share those instructions with us. Tell us what topic you are supposed to write about. Right now, I cannot be sure if this essay actually meets the requirements of the university for its applicants because I do not know what the instructions are.
As I read your essay, I could not help but get confused. What language teaching job are you volunteering for? It is it for teaching English speakers to to speak Mandarin or is it for Mandarin speakers to learn English? I think that we need to read your whole statement response before we can come to the conclusion that you can actually use what you have written as a response to the prompt. Right now, the language you used is not very good, is confusing, and does not seem to have a direct point to address. It is too generalized in terms.
For example, how did your recommendation as an exchange student relate to your interest in becoming a language teacher volunteer? What activities did you have that made you interested in this field? How do you see yourself using this field as a career path for yourself? What are your long term plans relating to this activity? There are just too many factors that need to be considered in the writing of your response. So we need to read what the prompt is so that we can narrow it down and help you better develop the essay.
Forget the grammar problems for now. We can fix those once the essay is properly written and developed to respond to the prompt requirements. I'll hold off on further comments until then :-)
