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I had few matchpoints. How I met a failure in my tennis career


ind1900 1 / -  
Jan 6, 2015   #1
I believe my english is weak.Can somebody edit it so that it looks stronger atleast the first paragraph pleaseee
common app promt 2 .Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure

Tennis is my life. My passion for the game started when I watched Roger Federer play against Andy Roddick in the 2005 Wimbledon match with my dad. Looking at the beautiful tennis game they were playing, I incidentaly fell in love with the sport. I started attending tennis coaching when I was six years old. From the age of 11, I have been participating in tournaments professionally.

When I was 14, I was ranked in top 50 in the country and was optimistic that in the upcoming year I would be ranked within top 25. The first five months I played around ten AITA un-14 tournaments and gave average performances. Then in July, I went to Bangalore to play an AITA tournament for un-18 and un-14. Since I had to play qualifying rounds for the un-18 category I went there a few days earlier. Although I lost for the un-18, I did not mind since I was confident of my un-14 match. I played well in the un-14 category with matches scheduled every day and finally reached the semi-finals. I went for the match, feeling refreshed and relaxed. I played steadily and won the first set but I lost the second set despite having three matchpoints in them.. The third set was the deciding one. This set went to the tie-break and and I got a 6-3 lead and I began playing the point for the match. This point took very long since both of us wanted it badly but at the end he hit a winner and also won the next four points and the match.

After this I lost all my confidence because I felt I had somehow thrown away the match and I was not able to overcome the despair I felt. I lost many matches over the next few months and my ranking dropped to below 100. My parents and my coach tried in vain to get me to come out of my depression. I began to have doubts as to whether I could ever play well again and in fact, whether I had ever really played well in the past. I began to worry that I had wasted a lot of my father's money and my childhood, chasing a false dream.

A few months later I was due to play the AITA Nationals, the most important tournament in India. I knew I was in no mental frame to play this tough tournament but as my parents and coach were very eager, I decided to make one last effort to get back into the game. I thought of all the hours I had spent on the game, the various achievements I had had, my recognitions and awards, and I was able to convince myself that unless I had been good at the game I could not have achieved these. I slowly felt my confidence and enthusiasm returning.. I spoke to my coach of my fears of having lost my game. He understood my apprehensions and we set up a schedule of rigorous practice and coaching.

In the first round of the tournament I played extremely well and beat the 28th ranked player in the country. Then I was scheduled to play the player ranked 15 in the country in my second round. This match went very close, but I eventually lost. Even so, it was one of the best tennis matches I had ever played. I was extremely happy of my performance in this tournament My rank went up from 100 to 70. Within the next few months I was back within the top 50 in the country and had regained my form.

My failure in the un-14 had set me back but now I had emerged as a much stronger person and learnt to look at all my performances rationally rather than emotionally. I am a more confident and determined person than I was before.
ssaallaamm 5 / 8 3  
Jan 7, 2015   #2
Hi,
the first paragraph is the introduction and the most important part of a text. It shows what you are going to talk about in the body and somehow leads the reader to the direction that the writer wants. This intorduction says that you love tennis, and you are a professional tennis player, but it does not say anything about the aim of this piece of writing. I suggest to add one or two sentences to make the later point clear

the country

what country?

I think you should directly get to the point and avoid talking about all matches you participated.

hope this helps
Cheers
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Jan 7, 2015   #3
Your essay comes across as very self-centric and shows the bruising of your ego very well. Letting the admissions officers know that you worked hard to better your game after each failure is also a good touch as it shows resiliency on your part. However, there is a lack of intellectual and moral maturity in the development of your essay. After every game loss / failure, surely there was a lesson you learned, possibly about humility or the importance of sportsmanship. These are the important character building elements that are developed by a sports person through his experience in playing his sport of choice. Try to develop these aspects. Explain the lessons that you learned with every failure because that is how you learn to accept and deal with failure / loss after each tournament. Lessen the discussion about all of the competitions you played in as Reza pointed out. The unspoken part of this prompt is that you need to explain the lessons that you learned from these failures and how you developed as a person from those life lessons. Address those points in order to better develop your essay theme and discussion.


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