Hi, This is a short answer for Emerson College, which is a Media and Communications school. I understand that it definatley needs some fixing up so if anyone has any input or advice it would be greatly appreciated!! Thank you!
A. As you know, the academic programs at Emerson College are focused on communication and the arts. Please tell us what influenced you to select your first choice major and, if applicable, your second choice major. If you're undecided about your major, what attracted you to Emerson's programs? Please be very brief (100-200 words).
If someone were to ask me where my passion lies, I do not respond with activities such as volleyball, reading, playing the piano, or drawing. Instead, my response is always "Words are my passion." For many, a word is just text or a sound. However, for me, a word is the essence of life. For as long as I can remember words have been of immense importance to me. Aside from being extremely reliable, words are flexible and very independent. One can mix and match words and connect them to create a story, am image. I would love to use words and continue telling stories at Emerson College. Thus, I have chosen Journalism-Print and Multimedia as my first choice major. I am confident that by combining my intellectual breadth, curiosity about the world, technical skills, and passion for words, I can make a lasting impression on our eternally growing multimedia world.
I do not respond with activities such as volleyball, reading, playing the piano, or drawing
^ that needs to be would not because the first part of the sentence is past tense, try reading it aloud with would not.
my response is always "Words are my passion.
^also need to change the tense
..try "Instead, my response would always be "words are my passion."
One can mix and match words and connect them to create a story, am image
^typo on am image..should be an image
but i don't understand how words can make images
I do like how you connected your passion for words to you're major :)
Good!
Buy the first sentence, I think, should be changed. It doesn't call the attention at all. The second sentence could work better.
For many, words are just text or sounds. (I think it sounds better in plural since a word cannot be independent as you mention later on and you then mention words in "For as long as I can...". (This is just my opinion and you may want to let it as it is.)
Good luck!
Can you check mine please?
BU three words: Dwarf name.
I think over all this is really good. The one thing I could suggest is trying to put in an example that shows, instead of simply telling, why words are so important to you. Tell a story about a time that words helped you or a time that something you read or heard someone say caused you to look at something in a different way, etc. Tell a story that shows why words are your passion rather than just stating that they are.
Also, I'm applying to Emerson as well so if you could review my answers it'd be much appriciated. Thanks and good luck :)
