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'medical equipment' - Why Duke Engineering?


AnnAMaY 1 / 3  
Dec 17, 2011   #1
The prompt is "If you are applying to the Pratt School of Engineering, please discuss why you want to study engineering and why you would like to study at duke.

WHY ENGINEERING? WHY DUKE?
Excitement, anticipation, and the feeling of discovery and no I'm not referring to how Columbus felt when he discovered the New World. These are terms that come to mind when I think about engineering and more particularly Biomedical Engineering (BME). I have always had a passion for Science, but that was not what lead me to BME. It was actually my first trip in an ambulance when I contracted dengue that got me thinking along this line.

I had never thought of how medical equipment not only in the ambulance but in general were made or who designed them. Equipment such as ultrasounds, MRI's and x-rays that had saved the lives of so many people that I knew had become so common place as if they were always there. I began to think of all the advances in technology and was excited at the opportunities of discovery that could be possible by making use of these. After doing some more research into the field I was certain that BME was for me.

I believe that Duke is the ideal place for me to pursue my dream of becoming a biomedical engineer as it will allow me to explore the frontiers of engineering, delve into cutting edge research and collaborate with the best in the field of BME. The hands-on learning and the opportunity to do research particularly in the field of biomedical imaging is very exciting. I hope that I can combine my efforts with fellow engineers to further improve or develop new imaging techniques that can be useful to society and improve the accuracy of diagnosis.
Alicegz 2 / 25  
Dec 17, 2011   #2
Also,
I had never thought of how medical equipments, not only in the ambulance, but in general, were made or who designed them.

Reading your essay, I could really tell that you had a passion for BME!

I would be so happy if you could help me with my essay too!
Cleopatra 8 / 22  
Dec 17, 2011   #3
I agree with Alicegz, however i think you should omit the red part instead of changing it. It is humorous but humor is subjective and if your reader doesnt ahve a sense of humor then it can leave off an informal, careless impression and will ultimately ruin his perception of your essay.

I can feel the passion but I would suggest overall re-reading your essay and trying to connect the sentences more to each other instead of leaving them choppy.

For example, you should use the prepositions "because, therefore, thus, consequently,.." etc to have the ultimate content of the essay flow
but good job :) a little revising and you'll have a great essay


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