Parents and teacher play important role ...
Comments: Try to have less about the general statements about teachers in the beginning unless you talk much about those later. The sentence about On the other hand... maybe that is your main point? If not, shorten it. Try not to restate the prompt verbatim. Try working on a stronger last sentence. Maybe something about what you learned, like a thesis of sorts.
When I was in elementary school, I use to be very shy and was not at all confident. In spite of being decently talented in field of education, art, music etc I never muster enough courage to present my talent in front of a group of people or fellow students. My parents always forced me to participate in competitions held in school and I always escaped from such participations. Mrs Mathew's teacher of my fourth grade somehow noticed my weakness of not willing to present my talent.
Could shorten this part of the paragraph to the main point: you were talented but shy and your fourth grade teacher, Mrs. Mathew, noticed.
whatever I am intended to do.
whatever I intended* to
me in moving towards my goal.
me move towards*
Since then I am able
I have been* able
Confidence in ones self is something which always helps to pave a way in a path of difficult situation and achieve success in life.
This could be a topic sentence idea. The next sentences about trusting in your own abilities, etc could be shortened a bit.
but what I came to know
formfrom other staff of the department was that he wanted some other student as his project advisee and I was allotted to him as his advisee.
So this professor wanted to have a person to advise? What do you mean by advisee?
At on hand lessons of a fourth grade teacher helps me to overcome my weaknesses and fight back all the tough situations in my life, on the other hand there are memories of a teachers which always fills my heart with feeling of agony.
On the one hand,* lessons of...helped* in my life, while* on the other, memories of another teacher always fills*.
This would be the more comparison part, but in your conclusion, you don't truly say what you learned from these experiences other than Mrs. Mathew. You don't say what you learned from the other teacher.
She is being acknowledged and will always be acknowledged by me for that.
What do you mean she is being acknowledged? That she is being acknowledged in this essay and that you acknowledge her "[awakening] joy in creative expression and knowledge"?
Is the teacher Mathew? or Mathews?
Good luck. Cheers~