Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
Please help me checking on grammar, punctuation, word choice, and tell me if my topic is good enough (is it too general or off topic? overused and boring?). Thanks.
"Can I bring them with me?" I asked my mom, pointing at the two stacks of math books, the only things in my room that I couldn't convince myself to leave behind. It was just my last attempt; I already knew the answer. I had to accept the fact that it was impossible to have them with me on this long trip. Last minute rush, I skimmed through the table of content of Plane Geometry volume II by V.V Praxolov (translated into Vietnamese). Kelly's theorem, linear transformation technique, and many others popped up. That's when I realized I didn't remember any of them.
If math were about memorizing, I should have been good at history as well. I actually believe learning math is not just knowing the words containing in the theorems but obtaining the logic it possesses.
It had been very natural for me to look at a theorem and try to visualize it in my head, write down anything in related until it just simply flowed to my mind. Once I no longer had to recall it by trying to remember the little blue box, the three bullets, or the first word in the second line of the form it was stated in books, I knew I had learned it. The concept and idea would stay as part of my knowledge even when I forgot what its name was.
I soon figured out that every science used the same logic of math combined with various conditions and forms (for example, Physics with forces, Chemistry with atoms). That was how I saw the importance of understanding math and was proud to know I was on the right track of thinking.
Confidently, I finally put down my favorite geometry book, knowing I already had what I needed the most. A week after the one-way flight to San Jose, I enrolled myself in Calculus, the highest math class available in my school, despite my counselor's warning that this was an advanced class and has already started for two months. Calculus was so new to me that I was a bit hesitated at first. But soon, I realized that the basic thinking was not so new. The complicated symbols didn't scare me at all as I knew what was really important: the sense of logic, the way of grasping the basic idea and using it in a much wider range.
Theorems are awesome. They are "designed" by the brilliantly intelligent scientists not to fail. However, despite any attempt, they still fail to bind me to their apparently restricting form.
Good evening :)
First, a few mechanical suggestions. Avoid contractions in formal academic writing. Make sure you are capitalizing proper nouns and the first words of sentences only. For instance, "Physics" and "Chemistry" shouldn't be capitalized.
"In a last minute rush, I skimmed through the table of content of Plane Geometry volume II by V.V Praxolov (translated into Vietnamese), Kelly's theorem, linear transformation technique, and many others also popped up."
"...knowing the words contained in the theorems but obtaining the logic theypossess ."
What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are? I don't see how you answered this part of the prompt. Otherwise, I think you've got a great start.
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