These are the four short essays, each one with its respective prompt, I would like you to help me with the mispellings, grammar mistakes, or simply by telling me what would you change to make them look better. I will check your essays if you help me, thank you!
Essay A
Choose an intellectual or creative opportunity (for example, community involvement, a summer program, a unique project, travel abroad, etc.) from your high school years that you have enjoyed and highlight how you have grown personally because of the experience. (200 Word Limit)
Last summer (2011), I had the opportunity of travelling all the way from my home city in Mexico to Europe for a period of 20 days, and with the only company of my 20 year old brother. It was exhilarating for us; we traveled to all kinds of different places: Seville, Madrid, Barcelona, Rome, Venice, Paris, Amsterdam and Florence, among others. From visiting the marvelous Louvre Museum in Paris to ride on a gondola in the beautiful canals of Venice in Italy; It was such a life changing experience, we did not only learn how to transport ourselves and how to take care of us in an independent way - as we were by ourselves the whole journey -, we also learnt how to take care from each other. We dint only learnt how to be more independent, we also got the opportunity to appreciate all types of art, architecture, people, and even nature; It was just extraordinary for us, it was like a whole new world to our eyes. We had the chance to appreciate and to understand the contemporary situations that people from the "old continent" wanted to express thought their art and sculptures; going from "La Gioconda" by Leonardo da Vinci, to the magnificent David by Michelangelo Buonarroti. The journey might be over, but the experience and knowledge acquired will stay with me and my brother forever.
Essay B
"Each friend represents a world in us, a world possibly not born until they arrive, and it is only by this meeting that a new world is born."
Anais Nin
From freshman year to now, we know that you have interacted with a number of people in your high school who are different from you and have affected who you are now. Tell us about one such relationship with a close friend, with a focus on the details of your interaction, not the person.
Not everyone has the chance of having a friend who you can talk to about anything. And I am lucky enough to have one, and I have known him for nearly 6 years now. It is something of an unconventional friendship, as we live in the same neighborhood, just 5 houses of distance his house from mine, as well as has the same age as me. This situation made us really close; we are able to talk about family, school, and even girls. This kind of relationship made us evolve as individuals; it gives us a sincere different point of view on the situations that we go through, and even though we are do not study in the same high school, we share friends, and, at some point, his family considers me as one more member it, as well as mine considers him a member too. This kind of friendships transcends boundaries, and makes us share our feelings and thoughts, something that is valuable for oneself to prosper in mind and soul. Because, if something I learned in life is that friends are the family that you choose.
Essay C
Tell us an interesting or amusing story about yourself that you have not already shared in your application. (200 Word Limit)
It was a sunny day in Florence, Italy. My big brother and I had just arrived to the city's train station, and we didn't have a clue of how to get to our hostel - as we were on our own -. So, we waited for a bus to come so we could find our way to the hostel, when suddenly this mysterious old man starts talking to us in Spanish - our native language- and offers his guidance to our hostel, he claimed to know the whole city like the palm of his hand, and all for a suspiciously small price. But, why trust this man? He seemed like a nice person, but we couldn't trust strangers. So a couple came soon after the man finished talking to us, and that gave us some time to think straight, and finally decided to sneak our way to the nearest bus and forget the man's indecorous proposal. We managed to get to the hostel, and what was our surprise when we were told at the hostel that there was a mysterious old man around the train station that stole things from unwise foreigners. We learned a lesson that day: Think straight before acting.
Essay D
"Music expresses that which cannot be put into words and cannot remain silent."
Victor Hugo
If someone were to look at your music collection right now, they would probably know a great deal about who you are. Individuals are drawn to music, and each song conveys something about that person. Select a musical piece to be your theme song. Tell us what it would be, and more specifically, why it represents who you are. (200 Word Limit)
I would choose Israel Kamakawiwo'ole's version of "Somewhere Over the Rainbow". This would be my theme song because, in my opinion, it represents my desire of finding that place for me where I can help the world to be a better place, that place over the rainbow where I can do in life what fills me with joy and happiness, in my case: curing people and saving lives as a Doctor. It makes me wonder if I can reach that place for me over the rainbow, that unique place where I can do what I love the most and live peacefully, Somewhere Over the Rainbow represents me because I am this particular type of person that only wants to feel loved, happy, and most of all, complete in mind and soul.
