Hello, Vincent! I think you are off to a pretty good start. You mentioned some great ideas and I believe you can write a good essay from them. I don't know if you actually want any grammar tips since this is just the rough draft, but, just in case, here you go: (Good Luck!)
That reflection in the mirror showed me that I
, too
, am somebody
and
while I may not be where I want to be I can certainly work toward getting
therewhere I want to beI just think that sounds more =D and positiveAs a result
, I used my motivation to begin working full-time and
engage in furthering my education
embrace some wonderful accomplishments
I hope you're going to talk about that in the rest of the essay? =)
In turn, it has provided me with the understanding of determination and self-satisfaction; determined to reach my goal of becoming a Certified Public Accountant and being satisfied with what I'm striving to achieve.
Since semicolons are used when the two parts of the sentence can stand on their own, the second half of that is a sentence fragment: determination...has what?
As an applicant of Howard University, being a non-traditional student has provided me with the advantage of experiencing life outside of the classroom, and gaining a precise understanding of my future plans. This in turn has resulted in my desire of applying to Howard as an Accounting major in which I'm positive I will acquire the knowledge needed to help me succeed throughout the life of my career
I think you should cut out "As an applicant...University." I don't really see how your
life as a student has been molded chiefly by being currently in the process of applying to a college. The rest of the sentence is really good, though. If you take out what I mentioned, the second sentence makes sense, too.