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MIT short answer: something you do for the pleasure of it


NBAhmed 1 / -  
Dec 10, 2009   #1
Feel free in critisizing my answer,..

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. Answer: Limit (100)

Some public schools in UAE lack competent teachers. Therefore, some students face problems in getting through their classes, particularly in math, computer, and physics. As a part of my community, I frequently offer my experience in these subjects, and I spend part of my free time helping them to find solutions, expand their knowledge, and teach them powerful and easier ways to study more efficiently. In fact, some of my tutored students were impacted and had great performance in their exams after I helped them. I am so proud and satisfied to help people whenever they seek my advice.

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yang 2 / 313  
Dec 10, 2009   #2
Some public schools in UAE lack competent teachers. Therefore, some students face problems in getting through their classes, particularly in math, computer, and physics.

impersonal conclusion. you don't have enough word to waste on theories or universal truths

so what pleasure do you find it it? it frankly sounds more like a work to me, but that's not bad. i myself wrote about my community service. However, you HAVE to say why you're having pleasure doing it (outside the simple fact that you enjoy helping people, which makes you sound simple, a bit unrealistic, and totally just wanting to find something that can help your profile, which is the goal, but can't be done blatantly)

and see how you talk more about the impact you made on others than the benefit you got form it? you need to focus on you, especially when you only have 100 words.

btw, the MIT essays are RIDICULOUSLY hard, cuz they really limit your words, and want to see your ability to convey emotion as well as pertinence in short essays.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Dec 12, 2009   #3
As a part of my community, I frequently offer my experience in these subjects, and I spend part of my free time helping them

Excellent! That is so impressive... but is there a tutoring program that this is a part of? Or is it among just your friends? I think the essay should give a sentence that explains how you offer your help.
bhan_msm 3 / 11  
Dec 20, 2009   #4
It is a well thought out essay on your behalf.To make it just a wee bit more attractive,you can probably add names of any particular student you have helped in any subject.

But overall,If I would have been the administrator,I would have accepted your answer.
yang 2 / 313  
Dec 20, 2009   #5
names of any particular student you have helped in any subject.

I don't think that adding random names would make it more personal to the reader...but that might just be me.
alejxa 3 / 7  
Dec 20, 2009   #6
yeah i agree that it needs to be more personal. I also applied to MIT, and know that they definitely do not give much room to work with.

Also, Is this really an activity you truly enjoy? I began writing about my volunteering as well and as a teacher suggested they just want something you do for fun - I ended up writing about cooking and baking which i truly enjoy.
yang 2 / 313  
Dec 20, 2009   #7
alejxa
did you apply early? if so, what's the decision?
lowcal 12 / 27  
Dec 20, 2009   #8
you have the overall idea but may be you should consider expanding. i know its a word limit, but emphasize more on the "pleasure" tutoring gives you.


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