MIT Short Answers (ballroom dance; civil and environmental engineering)

These are the prompts and my responses to the MIT short answer questions... Any grammatical help and/or content suggestions would be greatly appreciated! Thank you!

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it.

Despite my lack of coordination and balance, I knew from the day I watched a competition at MIT that I was born to ballroom dance. Never in my life have I felt so beautiful and graceful as when I am dancing. Even though I'm till very much a beginner to this art, ballroom is something I want to work at and perfect. I dream of competing at the very same competition that first inspired me to dance. Dancing has awakened a side of myself I've never known, and instilled in me an unwavering confidence.

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why?

I'm currently most interested in Course 1: Civil and Environmental Engineering. A background in civil engineering and environmental sciences will best suit my interests by combining my two loves: science and social justice. With courses like 1.020 and 1.070, I will be equipped with the knowledge and tools needed to get out in the field and help solve infrastructure-related or environmental problems in developing communities around the world. Classes in this department will help me understand the implications of human interaction with the environment, and discover how we can best reverse our negative effects.

Your first sentence is really cool:

Despite my lack of coordination and balance, I knew from the day I watched a competition at MIT that I was born to ballroom dance.

Classes in this department will help me to understand the implications of human interaction with the environment, and discover how we can best reverse the damage for which we are responsible.

Great job!!!

Correction:

when I am dancing. Even though I'm "(still)" very much a ....
-------->you wrote "till" very much a....
Unless you meant to write it like that...

other than that , i couldnt find anything else.
Nice work especially that first line. shows determination and passion for the dancing thing...