Computers have always intrigued me, and the developments in the last decade show that sky is the limit for the advancement of Computers. Computer have always had such an impact on me that once I dismantled my own PC just to satisfy my curious mind, that wanted to know what actually exists in that box called CPU. To my great delight, I was able to assemble it back and it was running just as normal. After this experience my love for computers grew infinitesimally. Therefore, Computer Science & Engineering at MIT appeals to me the most, as of now.
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Prince
Computers have always intrigued me, and the developments in the last decade show that the sky is the limit for the advancement of Computers. Computers have always had such an impact on me that once I dismantled my own PC just to satisfy my curious mind, that I just wanted to know what actually exists in that box called CPU. To my great delight, I was able to assemble it back reassemble it and it was is now running just as normally . After this experience, my love for computers grew infinitesimally. Therefore, at this point Computer Science & Engineering at MIT appeals to me the most, as of now .
Hi Prince, you should put a little more time into giving other people feedback! :-)
Also, you used infinitesimally incorrectly.
I like that it is short and to the point. Yet, I believe you can put a little more time into it. I know it is hard to put in 100 words but MIT is a very challenging school which expects the best of you. LIke EF Kevin said, put a little bit more time into giving feedback.
Definitely add more substance - there's too much "fluff" right now.
Computers have always intrigued me, and the developments in the last decade show that sky is the limit for their advancem ent. of Computers .
Therefore, Computer Science and Engineering at MIT appeal to me the most, as of now.
Comp. Science and Engineering make a strong combination because of the way the world is changing in these first years of the 21st century. I think you are on the right track!
