MIT essay. About my dance workshop charity to raise money to a boy who got cancer. Feedback
my contribution to a community
STUDENTS WORK TO IMPROVE THEIR COMMUNITIES IN DIFFERENT WAYS, FROM TACKLING THE WORLD'S BIGGEST CHALLENGES TO BEING A GOOD FRIEND. DESCRIBE ONE WAY IN WHICH YOU HAVE CONTRIBUTED TO YOUR COMMUNITY, WHETHER IN YOUR FAMILY, THE CLASSROOM, YOUR NEIGHBORHOOD, ETC. (200-250)
Along with organizing different charity campaigns wholeheartedly, I have motivated people within my community to not only use their talents and assets to inspire others but to also believe in themselves and understand their underlying self worth and potential.
Recently a student of my school suffered from cancer and had to go to South Korea for medical treatment. The cost of it was so expensive that all school members decided to raise money to help him. Besides this fantastic initiative, I asked myself what else could be done to help him.
Since dance is my passion, I came up with the idea of organizing dance workshops to raise more money for him. I called choreographers I knew, and I made posters. My friends printed tickets. We started to sell tickets and announce this event to the whole city. I was so pleased when some restaurants called me to organize free coffee breaks that day to support the initiative. One of our guest-choreographers invited a TV Channel to broadcast our friend's story to the whole country. Finally, 130 people came to our event, we could raise $350, and the most important - everyone was happy and satisfied.
My friend, Rayimbek, could finally face his fate with hope and the support of thousands of caring people. After the event, people thanked us for organizing this charity campaign. People said they had a great time with other people. Someone was grateful that they also helped Rayimbek. I accept that this event was only drop in an ocean. However, the ocean is made of drops.