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MIT: How has your world shaped your dreams?

cupnoodle123 15 / 52  
Dec 28, 2011   #1
Right now 280 wds... Sorry to those whom Ihaven't read the essays of yet..Iwill get to that sorry!!

Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations?(*) (200-250 words)

When I was young, my father's engineering office was interesting to me, with a lot of wires and machinery. Yet I was in that environment often, scampering around the office, watching his coworkers test electronics on their computers. When daddy came home, he and mom would talk about his business day and I would be drawn into the often anxious, often excited talk about "sales", "products" and "investors." In church, my dad used his engineering skills to wire the security system for the building, and in the summer he would organize robotics camps for kids. Few other fathers could do what my father did, and I felt proud of him. At home I tried to listen patiently as my dad introduced me to mechanical design, electronic parts, and programming. I did not really understand how whole machines could be controlled by just one page of typed code, and this began my curiosity to understand the process of inventing electronics, beneath all their glamour and functions.

In high school, after taking AP Computer Science and then interning at a wireless communications company during the summer, I found I had the passion for programming and the interest to become what my father was: an electrical engineer. My APCS class had had only four girls in a class of thirty, so I already knew that this was a male-dominated field. But, I feel I can take on the challenges of entering this field because I have a true interest in it and familiarity with it after growing up in around my father. I want to be as talented an engineer as my dad is, and I know he is one engineer who will support me all the way.
deremifri 9 / 137  
Dec 28, 2011   #2
first sentence: interesting office
second sentence: yet was there often. I think yet indicates some sort of contradiction,
which is not here.
the girl part is not necessary.
Maybe try to add something about what fascinated you about engineering.

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