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"You're such a mom" - Yours and others opinion about yourself

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Dec 3, 2020   #1

Tell us about who you are.

How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you?

"You're such a mom." says my best friend, Alena as I put her baby sister to sleep. So, I guess my friends would describe me as a big carebear. I think this comes from my ineluctable need to show affection. This is my most evident feature- to have a big heart and tend for people. I come from a background that deems it necessary to not show emotion. To be practical, and work with the mind. But I like to challenge this unconventional thinking. So what if we work with both heart and mind? This is how I function. We had a science competition recently, and at least 50-60 students had participated in it. While everyone chose traditional topics, like the working of robots or the generation of electricity, I wanted to appeal to the heart, that suggested I do something that not only educates but also influences. I decided to do my project on marijuana. Yes, the forbidden marijuana. Did you know that marijuana could be used to kill cancer cells? I didn't. I must say, that the research I did was something I was most proud of. I'm proud of it because I chose to be different that evening. I chose to bring a taboo topic to life and deliver it in its uncustomary positive sense. I chose to fuel my inquisitiveness with the twin motive of changing perspective. As humans, we tend to overlook the positives and focus on the negatives, and I wanted to change this. We did not end up winning that night, but I'm sure I impressed my judge and my fellow contestants with the facts I brought to the table.

Personally, I feel like the intro of this paragraph and the ending do not match. What do you think?

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,091 3252  
Dec 3, 2020   #2
It is an incorrect response to the prompt. Tell us about who you are always asks you to present yourself from the point of view of several people, within a limited word count. These people are:

- Your parents
- Your friends
- Your teachers
- Your community members

You need to pic 3 out of the 4 to discuss in the essay. Based upon the points of view from these people, you should be able to come up with a second paragraph that will explain what you are most proud of about yourself and why. Maybe you can use the the "big care bear" reference. Or anything else that would provide a collective character reference for yourself based upon the comments of other people about who you are or what you are as a person in their lives.

The multiple character view is meant to help the reviewer understand the kind of person you are in various settings. This will also help him assess you qualities as a person who could potentially be a member of their incoming student community. Would you be an asset to the community? Why? What can you add to the community that might be useful to others (most proud of)?

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