The moment has finally arrived; the college application essay has found its way onto my computer screen. No pressure. That was total sarcasm by the way. Days on end, I spent contemplating a "unique, and original" introduction to what may be the only chance of "standing out from the rest". Sure the third grade self would not find much difficulty in conjuring up a topic and introduction, but I guess knowing that one's future played a fair amount in five hundred words, would add a tad bit of stress.
See, it is not knowing what to write that makes the process complicated. It is finding out how to write it all out and what to specifically say to make everything eloquently flow. That was always the weakness in writing essays. There is difficulty in starting off with the introduction and not knowing where to specifically end, but everything in between is a feeling of substance. Sometimes, I get lost within my own words, straying off topic and getting disorganized. And as much as I want the words to flow gracefully to the reader as it does within my own mind, it does not always happen. Draft after draft, error after error, the goal of perfection can seem intangible at times because there is always room for improvement. Then there are moments of realization that certain parts need to be added or extracted to stress a certain point. Sometimes I wonder how I made it to the finish line. Once reached completion, the "Wow, I finally did it" feeling fills me.
Writing an essay is how life and its situations are approached. The pen is passion and people are the paper. It is not exactly clear how to specifically start off, or how when and where to end. Nevertheless, everything else in between is direction, goals waiting to be embraced, and the desire to reach that "Wow, I finally did it" feeling blazes. It is the journey rather than the destination.
Although I may tend to stray, a wondering mind filled with curiosity and ideas have not gone in vein. Sometimes the beam of brilliance strikes at the most unforeseen moments. For instance, the passion for feeding the homeless has brought a loving recognition for helping people in need. In doing so, I am inspired to join the Peace Corps in the future and create a nonprofit organization that will assist people in third world countries.
I do not have novel literary works published in my ongoing book of seventeen years, but there is recognition from the people who have read my pages. In acknowledgment of character, service, and academics the honor of being in the National Honor Society was awarded. Those who have recognized my works have inspired me to do greater starting with an elite University.
Like the words to an essay, I can only hope that these words serve as the fingerprints that demonstrate an insight into the mind and its desire write on the world.
It sounds like a cool concept, but it can't avoid turning cliche. And I'm not sure if the AO's will find it so witty. Please read my NYU one. Thanks! :D
Hey workinprogress!
I really loved your essay. I think your own thoughts and personality really makes this vibrant and enjoyable to read. This is the first time i have seen anybody write like this, so it was pretty fun to read!
Just one note, it was kind of confusing as to what you were trying to say. It sounds like you want to major in English or something? I'm kind of confused. Like the essay is great but when I read it, I don't know what you're trying to say? :O. Probably is just me but I'm only guessing something about English major.
Good luck! =)
I really liked your essay, very different but still with solid themes and some really interesting observations about the world! I really loved your "The pen is passion and people are the paper." and "It is the journey rather than the destination."
Overall, I think you should go back try reading your essay out loud - there's a few sentences that sound a bit awkward and maybe you could try rewrite them so they are more concise and better convey your message. Also, I think you should try rework your introduction a bit; it's witty, but needs to be a little clearer with a better flow.
Great job though! (:
I love your essay! But one thing: i think it's go "in vain" and not "in vein".
"Sure the third grade self would not find much difficulty in conjuring up a topic and introduction, but I guess knowing that one's future played a fair amount in five hundred words, would add a tad bit of stress."
The concept and idea of this sentence along with the semi sarcasm is really good but maybe there is a way to highlight the thoughts behind it even more? And clarify it?
Ps: really appreciate it if you can check out my Moving Box essay.
Nice topic!
I think it's an innovative idea.
It is a great piece. I really like the third paragragh. Maybe you should elaborate on that point more.
"Writing an essay is how life and its situations are approached. The pen is our passion and we are the paper. We are not exactly clear how to specifically start off, or how, when and where to end. Nevertheless, everything in between is direction, goals waiting to be embraced, and the desire to reach that "Wow, I finally did it" feeling blazes. It is the journey rather than the destination."
It is just my personal opinion. Make your essay close to the readers~Good luck! You gonna shine!
Im sorry to say but this is not original. Half the kids in my school are using this idea. But you did make work into your advantage.
