"Money is not omnipotent, but no money is incapable" (common app -- concern)

"Money is not omnipotent, but no money is incapable". As Chinese children are getting more and more satisfied on substances, they also get a wry thought about money in mind.

What kind of adolescents have ambivalent money molded? I ever heard "Oh my father gave me an accessory credit card yesterday", "I lived in Shangri-La Hotel last week when I went to Hongkong to take the SAT test", and ever saw some adolescents took photos of their consumable and put those photos on the internet. The actions like the above which came from my friends and classmates are so universal around me and sometimes I feel like living in a school where money is sovereign and a style -"spending money is my right; giving money is my parents' responsibility" -is prevalent.

As I am from a bourgeois family, I used to envy those "rich" adolescents at first I contacted with them. As soon as I realized what kind of person I wanted to be, I became able to resist those blatant people. Living a frugal life molds a tough, brave and independent me. Without big house, beautiful bags and accessory credit card, I feel proud of struggling for my future by myself. I am not like those whose families can afford all educational fees in colleges. I am just the one who has to create advantageous conditions on my own. At my standpoint, over affluence of money has erased the spirit which students have to carve in the mind that frugality is a virtue. Doesn't it sarcastic that a large number of Chinese students in cities have forgotten about this precious spirits from our predecessors? In a word: They spend money like they earn it by themselves.

Actually we are a quite different generation from our parents. We have more creative fancy, more passion but less tough psyche. Many Chinese children concentrate too much on enjoyment, but seldom have the consciousness to comprehend the meaning behind money. As a result, they hardly feel grateful every time they get satisfied by parents' money, they only know to turn to parents for more money when they use up it without planning to be frugal, and they feel "proud" when they show their exorbitant booties to others. They may become transcendent people in the future, but they lose the precious concept of thrift and are inundated by peacockery.

Nobody can deny the exhilaration brought by money and nobody can dismiss the influence money has on adolescents in China. What I concern the most is that unlimited provision of money from parents has already erased the spirit of Chinese predecessors from the mind of Chinese adolescents and the coming generations of Chinese may become more and more tender and lack the ethos of thrift. To reach a conclusion, spending money without limitation has been a habit of thousands of Chinese adolescents, and parents should pay attention to the effect of excessive money: whether better economical condition makes healthier development for adolescents?

I love the poetry of this line but, unfortunately, it doesn't quite make sense. "Ambivalent" means having mixed feelings. How can money have mixed feelings? Probably, you are looking for some other word, though I am not sure what it is.

I like it that, throughout the essay, you are stretching to use a wide variety of words in creative ways. I think that the admissions committee will like that too, but just be very sure of the meanings of the words you are using.

For example:


I'm guessing that, here, you are thinking "booties" is the plural of "booty" in the sense of loot. But, actually, "booties" means buttocks in colloquial English. As much as I enjoy the idea of people showing their "exorbitant booties" with pride, I'm pretty sure that's not what you mean to say!

What kind of adolescents have ambivalent money molded? in this sentence, i want to express that money has two different faces:one is benefit to people, another is that money lead to a wry thought. i can not come out with the proper words

and they feel "proud" when they show their exorbitant booties to others. in this sentences, the dictionary says "booty" means things you buy...if it is not proper, can you give me an alternate word?

thx for you help!! :)