Through my life I had the opportunity to meet many people. My mother is without a doubt the most important person in my life. She made many sacrifices to raise me. She was a teacher; however she left her job to take care of me. She dedicated all her time in her efforts to bring me up. When I was young I was frequently falling ill and mom had many sleepless nights taking care of me. When I think about my mother it comes to my mind the memories of the city's park, where she took me every weekend to play and to watch the animals and the memories of the beautiful beach of Sousse with its magical sand. We went there to swim and to build sand castles. I built my castles too close to the shore, once I finished building them, sea waves destroyed them completely. So I began to cry but my mother was there to comfort me and she bought a lot of candies. Also my mother used to tell stories every night, the stories of one thousand and one nights, comic's books, and plenty of jokes. What a wonderful time!! When I enrolled at school, she was always helping me with my homework, clarifying the lessons and assisting me. I would never be a good student without her. She always encouraged me to do my best, to work hard. She taught me to respect the other', to be kind, and to be tolerant. I think that those values are important because they help me a lot through my social life in a way that I make friends quickly , I like the voluntary work , I enjoy helping other and others always help me when I need them . Mom taught me also the respect of the environment. She tells me always to turn off the lights when I'm not in a room. We plant trees and other plants in our garden. Moreover she recycles by separating cans, bottles, plastic, and newspaper and she takes it to a recycling center once every two weeks or every month. I'm very fond of do it yourself .When I was a child; mom bought me Lego kits and other kits. I was always playing with Lego building robots, cars, castles... Now I have plenty of tools and I repair all broken things at home and this all due to Lego kits.
My mother had a big influence on my life since I was born. All the values she taught me made me a good citizen ready to help the other, concerned about the planet and try to make from our world a better place. I found those values in the job of engineer which I love. So I would to be an engineer and I think that my mother will be proud of me.
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When I was young I was frequently falling ill and mom had many sleepless nights taking care of me.
When I was young
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frequently fell ill, and my mom...
When I think about my mother it comes to my mind the memories of the city's park, where she took me every weekend to play and to watch the animals and the memories of the beautiful beach of Sousse with its magical sand. We went there to swim and to build sand castles.
When I think about my mother
, the memories of the city's park where she took me every weekend to play and to watch the animals comes into my mind. The visual memories of the beautiful beach of Sousse where we'd swim with its magical sand with which we build sand castles are still left in me. or something like that.
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IELTS TASK 2 ESSAY- grammar help!Oh, I think your mother is going to really feel fulfilled and happy when she reads this...
Through my life I had the opportunity to meet many people. not meaningful.
My mother is without a doubt the most important person in my life. ---Awesome sentence!
My mother had a big influence on my life since I was born. redundant
All the values she taught me made me a good citizen ready to help
the others, concerned about the planet and trying to make
from our world a better place.
Nice job! I like your writing style!! To improve this, you should try to show how this influence has shaped your outlook on the future and your career. How has her influence shaped your aspirations in college? :-)
