My mousetrap-powered vehicle began inching in a straight line; Caltech Diversity Essay

Prompt: In an increasingly global and interdependent society, there is a need for diversity in thought, talent, and experiences in science, technology, engineering and mathematics. How do you see yourself contributing to the diversity of Caltech's community?

As I flicked the mousetrap's trigger mechanism with a pen, "snap!" My mousetrap-powered vehicle began inching in a straight line. Spectators and I stared in apprehension at the snail-like balsa wood vehicle.

After my vehicle halted, I rejoiced. The half-pound mousetrap car had trekked 64 meters, winning first place at the interscholastic Boeing competition. However, it wasn't until questions flew at me that I firsthand understood an important element in the scientific community: public speaking.

"So, how does this work?" a Boeing engineer inquiring about my mousetrap car. "What principles are behind this?" "Why do this?"
A veteran in Speech and Debate extemporaneous speaking, I grasped the vital connection between the working mind and talent behind the math and sciences, and their public distribution. There needs to be a public voice reinforcing closeted passion and advanced thinking. I strive both to innovate and communicate whether with peers or Boeing employees.

you need to focus more on your contributions to the university. you have a whole paragraph leading up to your answer, then only give a one sentence response. thants my opinion at least, someone else may have another.

Actually, I feel differently. This essay effectively answers the prompt. It's obvious the diversity he will contribute the school ;an innovator who is also a great public speaker.


I don't think 'public distribution' works there (incorrect choice of words).

Wow, you're an environmentalist,an athlete and now a public speaker and an innovator. What don't you do? Lol. Great essay by the way.